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Do you agree or disagree with the statement University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study v.1

University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study v. 1
Some people argue that the problem of traffic jam should be tackled by giving people free bus and train passes at all time whenever they need. While I accept that may suit many people, I believe that government should give more solutions to tackle this problem. On the one hand, there are a variety reasons why helping people easily access to public transports without paying the fee is beneficial in some ways. First, the using of bus and trains would help to ease traffic flow. If the government issue free bus and train passes for people in their countries, this would encourage more people to use public transport instead of driving their car to go offices or schools. Furthermore, using free public transports can help people avoid rush hour traffic jams. This may lead to cutting the commuting times. On the other hand, governments should consider giving more solutions to solve the traffic congestion. Firstly, people who do not abide by the rules of the roads should be severely punished. For example, in Viet Nam, when people try to cross red lights, they must be paid about 200, 000 VND for their guiltiness. Secondly, one way to reduce traffic problems in the cities is to upgrade and expand transportation provision. This may lead to ease traffic flow in city centres and the surrounding area. In conclusion, it is certainly true that giving people free public transportations can be an important factor to solve traffic jam, but this is by no means the key consideration for governments in solving this problem.
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argue that the problem of
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traffic
jam should
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by giving
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people
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free
bus and train passes at all time whenever they need. While I accept that may suit
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many
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people
, I believe that
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government
should give more solutions to tackle this problem.

On the one hand, there are a variety reasons why helping
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people
easily
access to
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public
transports without paying the fee is beneficial in
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some
ways.
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, the using of bus and trains would
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help
to
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ease
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traffic
flow. If the
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government
issue
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free
bus and train passes for
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people
in their countries, this would encourage more
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people
to
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use
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public
transport
instead
of driving their car to go offices or schools.
Furthermore
, using
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free
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public
transports can
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help
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people
avoid rush hour
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jams. This may lead to cutting the commuting times.

On the other hand
,
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governments
should consider giving more solutions to solve the
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traffic
congestion.
Firstly
,
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people
who do not abide by the
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rules
of the roads should be
severely
punished.
For example
, in
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Viet
Nam, when
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people
try to cross red lights, they
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must
be paid
about 200, 000 VND for their guiltiness.
Secondly
, one way to
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reduce
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traffic
problems in the cities is to upgrade and expand transportation provision. This may lead to
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ease
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traffic
flow in city
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centres
and the surrounding area.

In conclusion
, it is
certainly
true that giving
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people
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free
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public
transportations can be an
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important
factor to solve
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traffic
jam,
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but
this is by no means the key consideration for
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governments
in solving this problem.
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IELTS essay University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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