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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements In twenty years that would be fewer cars in use that there are todayUse specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.1

In twenty years that would be fewer cars in use that there are todayUse specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1
Art has contributed immensely to enrich the cultures around the world. However, during the recent past, in some countries, people have lost their interest in visiting museums and art galleries. There are many reasons behind this trend, and there are countermeasures which could take in order to increase the interest in citizens toward art. Undoubtedly, art enriches the culture; however, it does not provide any advantages in improving the living standards of human beings. For instance, electricity, new technological innovation such as fuel-cell vehicles assist people in different ways to uplift their living standards. Without electricity, no one will be able to use modern amenities. As a result of this, people are attracted to technology than observing art paintings and sculptures. Furthermore, another main reason in declining the interest of art is, the financial support and encouragement which is given by the governments are not enough. During the past, the kings gave a massive contribution towards artists; hence, we can see many numbers of amazing arts from the past. Nevertheless, the art and culture co-exist; consequently, art should be preserved. The government should allocate funds and encourage the artists to create more stunning creations. The state should create more jobs in this sector by building more art galleries. Moreover, introducing art competitions with reasonable prices among society is another way of capturing the interest of the public. This will encourage children to learn in art streams and master it. In conclusion, the effective way to nurture art is to capitalize on the economic potential in it. The government can do this by creating more jobs in this sector
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Art
has contributed
immensely
to enrich the cultures around the world.
However
, during the recent past, in
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some
countries,
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people
have lost their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
in visiting museums and
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art
galleries. There are
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many
reasons behind this trend, and there are countermeasures which could take in order to increase the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
in citizens toward art.

Undoubtedly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
enriches the culture;
however
, it does not provide any advantages in improving the living standards of human beings.
For instance
, electricity, new technological innovation such as fuel-cell vehicles assist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ways to uplift their living standards. Without electricity, no one will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
modern amenities.
As a result
of this,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are attracted
to technology than observing
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art
paintings and sculptures.
Furthermore
, another main reason in declining the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
is, the financial support and encouragement which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
are not
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enough
. During the past, the kings gave a massive contribution towards artists;
hence
, we can
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see
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many
numbers of amazing
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arts
from the past.

Nevertheless
, the
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art
and culture co-exist;
consequently
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
should
be preserved
. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should allocate funds and encourage the artists to create more stunning creations. The state should create more jobs in this sector by building more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
galleries.
Moreover
, introducing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
competitions with reasonable prices among society is another way of capturing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
interest
of the public. This will encourage children to learn in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
streams and master it.

In conclusion
, the effective way to nurture
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
is to capitalize on the economic potential in it. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can do this by creating more jobs in this
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sector
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In twenty years that would be fewer cars in use that there are todayUse specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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