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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? “In twenty year there will be fewer cars in use than there are today”Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.16

“In twenty year there will be fewer cars in use than there are today”Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 16
Some people suggest that, as the world moving forward, there will be more cars in use in the next two decades than there are now. Because technologies make everything faster, people may even need the faster car than the current models available. However, in my opinion, I believe that in the future, people tend to decrease the use of car. The world can has the better means of transportation. In this essay, I will provide the reasons and examples to support my viewpoint. First, the public transportation tends to be cheaper because of the advanced technologies. Although nowadays the cost of flying across the continents limits people to stay around their hometown, it’s possible that there will be the other cheaper and easier ways to transfer people or product in upcoming future. For example, recently, the Space X company has launched the first reusable sky rocket that can return to the Earth after finishing the mission in the space. This innovation reduce the cost of sending the rocket into the space enormously and become the hope of the new transportation mode for the humanity. Clearly, it’s very likely that the transportation cost will be reduced immensely soon and the cars in use will be reduced. Second, people will seek for the comfortable more than they do in the pass. Anything quick and easy will be more interested. For instance, now Uber, the start-ups company from the US, can provide the driver for anyone who need by just using the mobile phone. There’s no need to seek for the taxi anymore and surely no need to own a car. This makes people have more time to do things that matter rather than wasting time on non-productive tasks. Moreover, other transportation modes can take people to their destination faster than using car. There’re more and more routes of airplane, which far faster than car. So people tends to switch the mean of transportation from car to other mode. Lastly, the car emits more pollution than the public transport. People all over the world now concern so much about the environment. They realize that human rely on the situation of the Earth. Hurting the nature by using more energy can hurt ourselves as well. To illustrate, the train need only one machine to put it forward but can carry more than 100 persons. In contrast, the car uses one machine to carry only 3-4 people. As a result, people recognize the negative impact of using cars and tends to decrease the use of them. In conclusion, there’re several reasons that the number of the cars in use will be decreased. The other transportation modes will be cheaper and take place of cars. As mentioned, people tends to seek for the easier way to transport and reduce the pollution by reducing the use of cars. For the reasons explored above, I strongly feel that in the next twenty years, there will be fewer cars than there are now.
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. The world can has the better means of
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. In this essay, I will provide the reasons and examples to support my viewpoint.

First
, the public
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tends
to be cheaper
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because
of the advanced technologies. Although nowadays the cost of flying across the continents limits
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people
to stay around their hometown, it’s possible that there will be the
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other
cheaper and easier ways to transfer
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or product in upcoming future.
For example
, recently, the
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Space X
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has launched the
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reduce
the cost of sending the rocket into the space
enormously
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mode for the humanity.
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cost will be
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will seek for the comfortable more than they do in the pass. Anything quick and easy will be more interested.
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company
from the US, can provide the driver for anyone who
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by
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using the mobile phone. There’s no
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to seek for the taxi anymore and
surely
no
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have more time to do things that matter
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modes can take
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to their destination
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Lastly
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emits more pollution than the public transport.
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all over the world
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concern
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much about the environment. They realize
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that human rely
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can carry more than 100 persons.
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recognize the
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impact of using
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cars
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of them.

In conclusion
, there’re several reasons that the number of the
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cars
in
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will
be decreased
. The
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other
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transportation
modes will be cheaper and take place of
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cars
. As mentioned,
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tends
to seek for the easier way to transport and
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the pollution by reducing the
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. For the reasons explored above, I
strongly
feel that in the
next
twenty years, there will be fewer
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than there are
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.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay “In twenty year there will be fewer cars in use than there are today”Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
494 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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