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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is a waste of time for governments to fund space travel or space exploration. v.409

It is a waste of time for governments to fund space travel or space exploration. v. 409
The development of computers has become a topic of debate in the recent years, as some believe it to be the best invention whereas others hold different opinions. Undoubtedly, one of the most valuable innovations in the last decade is that of the computers. The world has become completely digital after the development of these operating devices. I totally agree with this fact. The Computer has a range of softwares and features that lead to its special application in almost all the fields today, such as the medical field, engineering and many more. A research in Alberta University has grounds for the use of computers and associated devices for more than 80% of the technical and non-technical departments. This consequently has made the work so much effortless and fast-paced for humans. For instance, the RAM of a computer has so much memory that years of data can be stored in it, which is otherwise a tedious and need lot of space to store. Further, PCs and laptops are of much importance in the research sector. The complex calculations and statistic involved in numerous research works have been made much easier and has further led to other beneficial outcomes and progressions in health, space and a lot of other sectors, favouring mankind. Another feature of computer involves the use of virtual apps and messaging features. The world has become a global village and the mode of communication across the globe has become so much simpler. Say for example, a person sitting in India can talk and even video call much more easily and at lesser cost with a person sitting in another country or even another continent, without any barrier. This has led to so much time saving and made life more enjoyable. To conclude, without any second opinion, the development and increased availability of hardware gadgets like PCs, laptops, MAC book, etc is the best thing that has happened to the mankind, in last 100 years. So, these all should be used in a fruitful manner and maximum advantage should be taken for the benefits of the world.
The development of computers has
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become
a topic of debate in the recent years, as
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some
believe it to be the best invention whereas others hold
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different
opinions.
Undoubtedly
, one of the most valuable innovations in the last decade is that of the computers. The world has
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become
completely digital after the development of these operating devices. I
totally
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agree
with this fact.

The Computer has a range of
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softwares
and features that lead to its special application in almost all the fields
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today
, such as the medical field, engineering and
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many
more.
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A research
in Alberta University has grounds for the
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use
of computers and associated devices for more than 80% of the technical and non-technical departments. This
consequently
has made the work
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so
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much
effortless and
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fast
-paced for humans.
For instance
, the RAM of a computer has
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so
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much
memory that years of data can
be stored
in it, which is
otherwise
a tedious and need
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lot of
space to store.
Further
, PCs and laptops are of
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much
importance in the research sector. The complex calculations and statistic involved in numerous research works have
been made
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much
easier and has
further
led to other beneficial outcomes and progressions in health, space and
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a lot of
other sectors,
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favouring
mankind.

Another feature of computer involves the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of virtual apps and messaging features. The world has
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become
a global village and the mode of communication across the globe has
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become
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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much
simpler. Say
for example
, a person sitting in India can talk and even video call
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much
more
easily
and at lesser cost with a person sitting in another country or even another continent, without any barrier. This has led to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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much
time saving and made life more enjoyable.

To conclude
, without any second opinion, the development and increased availability of hardware gadgets like PCs, laptops, MAC book, etc is the best thing that has happened to the mankind, in last 100 years.
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So
, these all should be
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used
Consider replacing "in a fruitful manner" with the adverb for "fruitful"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a fruitful manner
and maximum advantage should
be taken
for the benefits of the world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is a waste of time for governments to fund space travel or space exploration. v. 409

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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