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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities v.2

For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities v. 2
it is argued that for the successful future of a state, governments should focus to spend money on very young children' s education especially five to ten years old, instead of spending on collages. In my opinion, I believe that early age education is crucial for growth, in particular in terms of improvement and sustainability. On the one hand, improvement is, maybe, one of the most important values in educating step in young children. improvement is an increase of features in something to become more efficient and effective than the past. Thanks to this ability, one can be well educated particularly at a young age. Therefore, it is more valuable to teach someone in the first step. For example, if young children helped by the government more than older, children easily get boost themselves because of their needs for information. With all these educations, young brains will take the place of the future world and control this planet. So, basically, focusing on young children should not be skipped. one big step on this stage allows a serious effect on the development of a country. In addition to improvement, sustainability is another noteworthy reason. sustainability is keeping alive what is observed, taken, learned and continuity for the future. Owing to this, one can stay profitable as long as supported by the government that exerted money to a young one. these expenses will have positive outcomes if we compare it with less money spend. because success always occurs when there is a struggle. this situation is not related to an expense for universities or buildings. this is an investment in future sustainability. For instance, in a school, the students reflect on the value of education, not the building or university name. After 10 years, tangible values may diminish, but intangible things like ideas, thoughts of young brains may be much more qualified and well designed because of government spendings on the past. In a nutshell, when all the specific reasons and relevant examples are considered and evaluated, it can be concluded that governments spend money substantialy on young ages than on universities.
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it
is argued
that for the successful
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future
of a state,
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governments
should focus to spend
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money
on
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very
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young
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children&
#039; s
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education
especially
five to ten years
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old
,
instead
of spending on collages. In my opinion, I believe that early age
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education
is crucial for growth,
in particular
in terms of
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improvement
and sustainability.

On the one hand,
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improvement
is, maybe, one of the most
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important
values in educating step in
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young
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children
.
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improvement
is an increase of features in something to become more efficient and effective than the past. Thanks to this ability, one can be
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well educated
particularly
at a
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young
age.
Therefore
, it is more valuable to teach someone in the
first
step.
For example
, if
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young
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children
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helped
by the
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government
more than older,
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children
easily
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get
boost themselves
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because
of their needs for information. With all these
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educations
,
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young
brains will take the place of the
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future
world and control this planet.
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So
,
basically
, focusing on
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young
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children
should not
be skipped
.
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one
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big
step on this stage
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allows
a serious effect on the development of a country.

In addition
to
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improvement
, sustainability is another noteworthy reason.
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sustainability
is keeping alive what
is observed
, taken, learned and continuity for the
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future
. Owing to this, one can stay profitable as long as supported by the
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government
that exerted
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money
to a
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young
one.
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these
expenses will have
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positive
outcomes if we compare it with less
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money
spend.
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because
success always occurs when there is a struggle.
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this
situation is not related to an expense for universities or buildings.
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this
is an investment in
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future
sustainability.
For instance
, in a school, the students reflect on the value of
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education
, not the building or university name. After 10 years, tangible values may diminish,
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but
intangible things like
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ideas
, thoughts of
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young
brains may be much more qualified and
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well designed
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because
of
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government
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spendings on
the past.

In a nutshell, when all the specific reasons and relevant examples
are considered
and evaluated, it can
be concluded
that
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governments
spend
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money
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substantialy
on
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young
ages than on universities.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children than to spend money on universities v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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