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"Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " v.860

" People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " v. 860
" Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in today' s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " Automobiles have drastically affected people’s lives. Today, there isn’t a member of family who doesn’t have a car in his house. Personally, I believe that people rely on vehicles rather than their feet. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. First of all, usage of automobiles in daily life has made people too dependent on them. Workers are the main people who use automobiles to drive to their work, which assist them to be punctual. Employers are too strict nowadays, so they have specific criteria for their employer amongst which punctuality is one. Thus, individuals try their best to be an early bird in their office, so they don’t lose their labor. My parent’s experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, my mother worked in a kindergarten, and she was usually late for work because she had to change my brother’s diaper every morning and feed him before going to work. Soon, she received many warnings from her boss that pushed her to purchase a Toyota, so she can get to her office on time. Still, she can’t go to her work without a vehicle. Secondly, people are very sluggish in today’s world, which make them dependent on automobiles. Parents use car to drive to work; children use bus to get to school; and grandparents use taxi to get to their children’s home. It is obvious that using something consistently turns to a habit. Consequently, everyone uses vehicle just because they are very lethargic. For instance, long ago, my brother was in opinion that using car isn’t good for heath, so he went everywhere by his feet. Now that he has turned twenty-one, he can’t even go to the restaurant near downtown to get a pizza. He says “I have used school bus for twelve years, my personal car for two years, and my friend’s motorcycle for a year. Of course I am too lazy to go by my foot. ” Hence, it can be inferred that people are dependent on vehicles because they are too lazy. Consequently, I think that automobiles have become a part of human’s life. This is because they need it in their daily life, and because they are too lazy.
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agree
or disagree with the following statement?
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today&
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dependent
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specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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drastically
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affected
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people’s
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lives
.
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Today
, there isn’t a member of family who doesn’t have a
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car
in his
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house
.
Personally
, I believe that
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people
rely on vehicles
rather
than their feet. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

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First of all
, usage of
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automobiles
in daily life has made
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people
too
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dependent
on them. Workers are the main
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people
who
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use
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automobiles
to drive to their
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work
, which assist them to be punctual. Employers are too strict nowadays,
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so
they have specific criteria for their employer amongst which punctuality is one.
Thus
, individuals try their best to be an early bird in their office,
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so
they don’t lose their labor. My parent’s experience is a compelling example of this. Last
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year
, my mother worked in a kindergarten, and she was
usually
late for
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work
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because
she had to
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change
my brother’s diaper every morning and feed him
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before
going to
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work
.
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Soon
, she received
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many
warnings from her boss that pushed her to
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purchase
a Toyota,
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so
she can
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get
to her office on time.
Still
, she can’t go to her
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work
without a vehicle.

Secondly
,
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people
are
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very
sluggish in
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today
’s world, which
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make
them
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dependent
on
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automobiles
. Parents
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use
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car
to drive to
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work
; children
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use
bus to
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get
to school; and grandparents
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use
taxi to
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get
to their children’s home. It is obvious that using something
consistently
turns to a habit.
Consequently
, everyone
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uses
vehicle
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just
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because
they are
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very
lethargic.
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, long ago, my brother was in opinion that using
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car
isn’t
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good
for heath,
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so
he went everywhere by his feet.
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Now
that he has turned twenty-one, he can’t even go to the restaurant near downtown to
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get
a pizza. He says “I have
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used
school bus for twelve years, my personal
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car
for two years, and my friend’s motorcycle for a
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year
. Of
The comma is probably missing here: "course, I".
course I
am too lazy to go by my foot. ”
Hence
, it can
be inferred
that
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people
are
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dependent
on vehicles
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because
they are too lazy.

Consequently
, I
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think
that
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automobiles
have become a part of human’s life. This is
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because
they need it in their daily life, and
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because
they are too lazy.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay " People in today's world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. " v. 860

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
407 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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