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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.55

People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 55
According to the globalized world will let original tradition losing when the new technologies come. However, developing technology argued the old rules in the communities is changing indeed, human behaviour became very different rather than back time. I am positive about the new solution of technology, which broadens the traditional culture spread to the world. In general, people would say world globalized threaten the reserved domestic living. Despite, the internet is deeply embarked on our social life, it allows majority access virtual way to connect the other side of the city. Foreign languages will be easily learned from online courses or advanced devices. The particular method of drawing, cooking and agriculture from aboriginal tribes will be brought to the internet. The culture will be mixed and become diverse. On the other hand, those varieties of ways are constantly exchanging and enhancing. We absorb a better way and also put into our culture, make it better. Whereas, It is hard to lose knowledge of the cultures. On the contrary, technology facilitates the information to be stored on the devices. For instance, the old fashion taps or trendy online videos on YouTube, they are all great platforms that enable to save knowledge. Therefore, it will not disappear, but dwell's lifestyle will be effected through exotic information. Human evolution is always different from old time till now like language has been a controversial argument what is right and wrong until now. Nowadays, yoga activity is so popular because of the social network became an international exercise. It might cause a few Indian religion components, but still strongly alive and never go away from our life.
According to the globalized world will
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let
original tradition losing when the new
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technologies
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come
.
However
, developing
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technology
argued the
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old
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rules
in the communities is changing
indeed
, human
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behaviour
became
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very
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different
rather
than back time. I am
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positive
about the new solution of
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technology
, which broadens the traditional
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culture
spread to the world.

In general
,
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people
would say world globalized threaten the reserved domestic living. Despite, the internet is
deeply
embarked on our social life, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
majority access virtual way to connect the other side of the city. Foreign languages will be
easily
learned from online courses or advanced devices. The particular method of drawing, cooking and agriculture from aboriginal tribes will
be brought
to the internet. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
will
be mixed
and become diverse.

On the other hand
, those varieties of ways are
constantly
exchanging and enhancing. We absorb a better way and
also
put into our
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culture
,
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make
it better.
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Whereas
, It is
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hard
to lose knowledge of the
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cultures
.
On the contrary
,
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technology
facilitates the information to
be stored
on the devices.
For instance
, the
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old
fashion taps or trendy online videos on YouTube, they are all great platforms that enable to save knowledge.
Therefore
, it will not disappear,
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but
dwell's lifestyle will
be effected
through exotic information.

Human evolution is always
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different
from
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old
time till
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now
like language has been a controversial argument what is right and
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wrong
until
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now
. Nowadays, yoga activity is
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so
popular
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because
of the social network became an international exercise. It might cause a few Indian religion components,
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but
still
strongly
alive and never go away from our life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People in today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 55

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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