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DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THE FOLLOWING STATEMENT? TEACHERS SHOULD BE PAID ACCORDING TO HOW MUCH THEIR STUDENTS LEARN. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.846

TEACHERS SHOULD BE PAID ACCORDING TO HOW MUCH THEIR STUDENTS LEARN. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 846
Everybody desires a big pay check at the end of the month and teachers are not excluded from that list of people. But some people think teacher should be paid how much they teach to the student? So other set of people hold different view that teachers must be paid standard salary for their job regardless of their performance. However, my views are not indifferent than first set of people because if teachers are paid on some strict criteria they will learn new tactics to handle discreet student and they will put in extra effort to keep their knowledge updated. Further in my essay I would be elaborating my reasoning on my view. Firstly, If teacher’s will be paid after the analysis of their students’ performance they will able to know pros and cons of their teaching as their big or small amount of pay check will be self – explanatory to them. Adding to that, teachers would improve or learn various tricks of teaching different kids as every child is not alike in the class. For an instance – I was tutoring two students in my college days –a girl in standard 9th and her brother in standard 2nd. I used to get frustrated with the boy sometimes because he would turn up not doing his homework every other day and on top of that his parents doesn’t wanted me to be strict with him. I decided to not give him any homework for two days and ask him to study whatever subject he would wish to study in my lecture for those two days. I observed that he cannot study one subject for more than an hour in a day, since that day I started teaching him Mathematics for forty –five minutes and English for another half an hour for rest of my lectures and i used to ask him to choose, what he wants to do in his homework? This pattern of teaching worked so well that he stood 3rd in his standard. Which made me proud tutor of him. Secondly, Teachers would update their knowledge of the subject they teach as well as of other subjects, if their salary will be evaluated on their performance or result of their students. For an instance, my accounts teacher used to give us free classes after school hours to raise our class’s performance as that year school decided to bestow Rs 15000/- as bonus for best performing teachers. Apart from that he used to collect our overall exam feedback to counsel us to improve our marks in weak subjects. His theses effort impacted each and every student’s marks in final exam, annual result of our class for that year was history in our city. Undoubtedly, strict criteria for teacher’s remuneration will improve their expertise as well as student would get best quality education. Competition boast us to achieve better heights, similarly if teachers will be paid on the basis of the students’ performance they will be beneficial for learning students and bring monetary and professional gain to themselves.
Everybody desires a
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.
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people
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think
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teacher
should be
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paid
how much they teach to the
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student
?
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other set of
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people
hold
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different
view that
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teachers
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must
be
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paid
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standard
salary for their job regardless of their
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performance
.
However
, my views are not
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indifferent
than
first
set of
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people
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because
if
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teachers
are
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paid
on
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some
strict criteria they will learn new tactics to handle discreet
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student and
they will put in extra effort to
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keep
their knowledge updated.
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Further
in my essay I would be elaborating my reasoning on my view.

Firstly
, If
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teacher’s
will be
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paid
after the analysis of their
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students’
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performance
they
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will able
to know pros and cons of their
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teaching
as their
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big
or
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small
amount of pay
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check
will be
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self – explanatory
to them. Adding to that,
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teachers
would
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improve
or learn various tricks of
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teaching
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different
kids as every child is not alike in the
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class
. For an instance
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–
I was tutoring two
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students
in my college days –a girl in
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standard
9th and her brother in
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standard
2nd. I
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used
to
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get
frustrated with the boy
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sometimes
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because
he would turn up not doing his homework every other day and
on top of that
his parents doesn’t
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wanted
me to be strict with him. I decided to not give him any homework for two days and ask him to study whatever
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subject
he would wish to study in my lecture for those two days.
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I
observed that he cannot study one
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subject
for more than an hour in a day, since that day I
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started
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teaching
him Mathematics for
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forty –five
minutes and English for another half an hour for rest of my lectures and
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i
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used
to ask him to choose, what he wants to do in his homework? This pattern of
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teaching
worked
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so
well that he stood 3rd in his
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standard
.
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Which
made me proud tutor of him.

Secondly
,
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Teachers
would update their knowledge of the
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subject
they teach
as well
as of other
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subjects
, if their salary will
be evaluated
on their
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performance
or result of their
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students
. For an instance, my accounts
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teacher
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used
to give us free classes after school hours to raise our
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class
’s
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performance
as that year school decided to bestow Rs 15000/- as bonus for best performing
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teachers
. Apart from that he
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used
to collect our
overall
exam feedback to counsel us to
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improve
our marks in weak
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subjects
. His
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theses
effort impacted each and every
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student’s
marks in final exam, annual result of our
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class
for that year was history in our city.
Undoubtedly
, strict criteria for
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teacher’s
remuneration will
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improve
their expertise
as well
as
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student
would
A determiner is probably missing here: "get the best".
get best
quality education.

Competition boast us to achieve better heights,
similarly
if
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teachers
will be
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paid
on the basis of the
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students’
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performance
they will be beneficial for learning
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students
and bring monetary and professional gain to themselves.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay TEACHERS SHOULD BE PAID ACCORDING TO HOW MUCH THEIR STUDENTS LEARN. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 846

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
509 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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