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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Living in a city is better than living in a village. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v.801

Living in a city is better than living in a village. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v. 801
Living in community is not only a choice for every human stepping on the planet, but also a requirement for them to rise to prominence. Human societies are generally structured in two main parts, cities and villages, and everyone can decide on where he or she wants to live which can bring the most success and inside happiness for them. Germane to this fact, a question which is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether living in a city is preferred to living in a village or not. Despite this fact that some people might rather to live in a village, I' m personally on the conviction that living in a city can provide me with the best experiences of my life that I can ever have. As population grows in an area, It can absorb more financial resources which can lead to an advance in recreational equipment and facilities for the people who live there. Therefore in large cities there are many places for having fun with your friends or simply find a place to spend your weekend after a long working week. Large IMAX movie theaters, amusement parks, fantastic concert halls with amazing acoustic features which can make you alive when you listen to a music band after a fast-paced week are the things that bring the most joy and happiness to my heart and I can only find all these facilities in a city. Similarly having a great internet connection which can be found in big urban areas is another significant option that I really love to have in my life. Because of all these facilities which are provided with in big cities I definitely enjoy living in a crowded, big city. Another point which is equally important for me, if not more, is that living in big cities can provide a lot of opportunities, inter alia occupation, education and health care opportunities stands out the most. To delineate everyone in the world have some purposes and dreams to pursue and with the opportunities which are provided in the cities you can easily achieve them. I' ve always wanted to become a university professor and for accomplishing that wish I have to live in a city to use educational facilities like universities and tutoring classes if it is necessary and I also need to look for the teaching positions in a city. Furthermore living in a city can provide me with the opportunity of getting to know many new people everyday which can lead me to a better friendship circles and as a result I will have much more relations which is required to find a good occupation as a professor. Having a more convenient access to brand-new and advanced recreational facilities or better job opportunities is one of the main reasons that I personally like to live in large city. Although some people might prefer to have a quiet and peaceful life in village, the enjoyment of living in a crowded city takes precedence over living in a village in my attitude toward life and happiness. And as a person who lives in a very large city, Tehran, I, personally, take comfort in that.
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Living
in community is not
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only
a choice for every human stepping on the planet,
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but
also
a requirement for them to rise to prominence. Human societies are
generally
structured in two main parts,
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cities
and
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villages
, and everyone can decide on where he or she wants to
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live
which can bring the most success and inside happiness for them. Germane to this fact, a question which is matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether
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living
in a city
is preferred
to
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living
in a
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village
or not. Despite this fact that
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some
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people
might
rather
to
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live
in a
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village
,
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I&
#039; m
personally
on the conviction that
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living
in a city can provide me with the best experiences of my
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life
that I can ever have.

As population grows in an area, It can absorb more financial resources which can lead to an advance in recreational equipment and facilities for the
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people
who
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live
there.
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Therefore
in
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large
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cities
there are
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many
places for having fun with your friends or
simply
find a place to spend your weekend after a long working week.
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Large
IMAX movie theaters, amusement parks, fantastic concert halls with amazing acoustic features which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
you alive when you listen to a music band after a
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fast
-paced week are the things that bring the most joy and happiness to my heart and I can
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only
find all these facilities in a city.
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Similarly
having a great internet connection which can
be found
in
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big
urban areas is another significant option that I
really
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love
to have in my
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life
.
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Because
of all these facilities which
are provided
with in
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big
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cities
I definitely enjoy
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living
in a crowded,
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big
city.

Another point which is
equally
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important
for me, if not more, is that
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living
in
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big
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cities
can provide
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a lot of
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opportunities
, inter alia occupation, education and health care
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opportunities
stands out the most. To delineate everyone in the world have
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some
purposes and dreams to pursue and with the
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opportunities
which
are provided
in the
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cities
you can
easily
achieve them.
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I&
#039; ve always wanted to become a university professor and for accomplishing that wish I
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have to
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live
in a city to
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use
educational facilities like universities and tutoring classes if it is necessary and I
also
need to look for the teaching positions in a city.
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Furthermore
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living
in a city can provide me with the
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opportunity
of getting to know
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many
new
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people
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
which can lead me to a better friendship circles and
as a result
I will have much more relations which
is required
to find a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
occupation as a professor.

Having a more convenient access to brand-new and advanced recreational facilities or better job
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opportunities
is one of the main reasons that I
personally
like to
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live
in
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large
city. Although
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some
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people
might prefer to have a quiet and peaceful
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life
in
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village
, the enjoyment of
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living
in a crowded city takes precedence over
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living
in a
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village
in my attitude toward
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life
and happiness. And as a person who
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lives
in a
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very
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large
city, Tehran, I,
personally
, take comfort in that.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a city is better than living in a village. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v. 801

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
529 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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