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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Living in a city is better than living in a village. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v.342

Living in a city is better than living in a village. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v. 342
Many people believe that every single person should have access to education regardless their financial status, so it should be free of charge. I totally agree with this notion because free education contributes to equality among people and boosts economic growth. The first reason why I believe that education should be tuition-free is the fact that in this case people become more equal despite their social status. For example, free education in India erased social stratification among children from wealthy families and the youth from underprivileged families. This allowed people from different background to have equal chances to realise their potential, and, therefore, improved democracy in the country. That is why education should not be considered as a privilege and must be totally affordable for all people. Another essential argument for free education, in my opinion, is the economic growth it contributes to. It is obvious that countries with a high literacy rate normally have stronger economies, since their strength requires highly qualified specialists in different fields. Take Japan for example where a high number of educated people made the country one of the most developed in the world, although it does not have big deposits of natural resources. This means free education is justified by the boost of the country’s wealthy it provokes. In conclusion, I completely agree that all people around the world should be able to receive an education not only ones who can afford it. This is because it allows people to become equal and improves economics. However, making education free should not hurt its quality.
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of charge. I
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agree
with this notion
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because
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free
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contributes to equality among
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people
and boosts economic growth.

The
first
reason why I believe that
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education
should be tuition-free is the fact that
in this case
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people
become more equal despite their social status.
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,
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free
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education
in India erased social stratification among children from wealthy families and the youth from underprivileged families. This
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allowed
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people
from
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different
background to have equal chances to
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realise
their potential, and,
therefore
,
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improved
democracy in the
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country
.
That is
why
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education
should not
be considered
as a privilege and
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must
be
totally
affordable for all
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people
.

Another essential argument for
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free
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, in my opinion, is the economic growth it contributes to. It is obvious that
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countries
with a high literacy rate
normally
have stronger economies, since their strength requires
highly
qualified specialists in
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different
fields. Take Japan
for example
where a high number of educated
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people
made the
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country
one of the most developed in the world, although it does not have
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big
deposits of natural resources. This means
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free
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education
is justified
by the boost of the
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country’s
wealthy it provokes.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
that all
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people
around the world should be able to receive an
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education
not
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only
ones who can afford it. This is
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because
it
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allows
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people
to become equal and
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improves
economics.
However
, making
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education
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free
should not hurt its quality.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Living in a city is better than living in a village. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer. v. 342

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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