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TPO-41 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Throughout history, schools have been one of the most important source of expanding knowledge, and people respect teachers because of their high position in society. One of the most controversial questions about this subject is if teachers were more valued in past or in modern time by society? Some people think that teacher were appreciated more in the past; however, in my perspective, teacheres have a higher position nowadays for few reasons which I will elaborate more. First of all, tutors receive more money in the current world. The government gives a lot more salary to teachers because they are preparing new workers for the country and if they are not payed well, the produced workers won' t have high productivity and it decreases the overall strength of the nation in world. For example, my older brother was studying in a school that were poor and didn' t have money to gives it' s teachers a good salary. Since it was a privet school the government didn' t give any fund to the school so the teachers of the school didn' t work hard with the students and didn' t teach them well. At the end, none of the students of the school passed the national exam. But nowadays the government is responsible for that school and gives a lot of money to the teachers and the school has become the best school in state. Furthermore, parents are connected with tutors more these days. Due to prescence of mobile phone parents can call teachers or teachers can call parents whenever it' s necessery. Because of this new connection parents are familier with teachers more and respect them more because of their efforts in rising and teaching children, but in that time parents didn' t have any contact with teachers; therefore, they were not aware of each other and if children did something rude to the teachers, parents didn' t find about the behavior and were not able punish their children to respect the teachers. Finally, knowledge is of great importance in the modern period. Back in past, the society didn' t consider the knowledge and the school to be something crucial for their community and they thought someone has more value who earns more money, so teachers had a lower class amoung different careers. However, today, It' s impossible that parents don' t send their children to school because living without knowledge is not possible. everyone has some kind of profession that has learned from school. Therefore, teachers are considered the most basic element of teaching children a profession and society is in great need of better teacher, therefore they are appreciating tutors to compel them to teach better. To wrap it up, based on reasons mentioned above, society values teachers more because it needs them to raise the overall level of knowledge of the society because of the important role that information and knowledge plays in world. the Government gives more salary to them and parents are connected to teachers so children don' t dare to be rude to teachers.
Throughout history,
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schools
have been one of the most
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important
source of expanding
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knowledge
, and
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people
respect
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teachers
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because
of their high position in
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society
. One of the most controversial questions about this subject is if
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teachers
were more valued in past or in modern time by
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society
?
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Some
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people
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think
that
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teacher
were appreciated
more in the past;
however
, in my perspective,
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teacheres
have a higher position nowadays for few reasons which I will elaborate more.

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First of all
, tutors receive more
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money
in the
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current
world. The
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government
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gives
a lot more salary to
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teachers
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because
they are preparing new workers for the country and if they are not
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payed
well, the produced workers
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won&
#039; t have high productivity and it decreases the
overall
strength of the nation in world.
For example
, my older brother was studying in a
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school
that were poor and
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didn&
#039; t have
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money
to
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gives
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it&
#039; s
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teachers
a
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good
salary. Since it was a privet
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school
the
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government
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didn&
#039; t
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give
any fund to the
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school
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so
the
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teachers
of the
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school
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didn&
#039; t work
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hard
with the students and
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didn&
#039; t teach them well. At the
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end
, none of the students of the
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school
passed the national exam.
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But
nowadays the
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government
is responsible for that
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school
and
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gives
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a lot of
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money
to the
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teachers
and the
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school
has become the best
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school
in state.

Furthermore
,
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parents
are connected
with tutors more these days. Due to
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prescence
of mobile phone
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parents
can call
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teachers
or
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teachers
can call
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parents
whenever
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it&
#039; s
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necessery
.
Because of this
new connection
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parents
are
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familier
with
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teachers
more and respect them more
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because
of their efforts in rising and teaching
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children
,
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but
in that time
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parents
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didn&
#039; t have any contact with
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teachers
;
therefore
, they were not aware of each other and if
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children
did something rude to the
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teachers
,
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parents
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didn&
#039; t find about the behavior and were not
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able punish
their
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children
to respect the teachers.

Finally
,
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knowledge
is of great importance in the modern period. Back
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in past
, the
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society
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didn&
#039; t consider the
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knowledge
and the
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school
to be something crucial for their
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community and
they
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thought
someone has more value who earns more
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money
,
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so
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teachers
had a lower
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class
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amoung
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different
careers.
However
,
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today
,
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#039; s impossible that
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parents
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don&
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send
their
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children
to
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school
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because
living without
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knowledge
is not possible.
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everyone
has
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some
kind of profession that has learned from
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school
.
Therefore
,
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teachers
are considered
the most basic element of teaching
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children
a profession and
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society
is in great need of better
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teacher
,
therefore
they are appreciating tutors to compel them to teach better.

To wrap it up, based on reasons mentioned above,
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society
values
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teachers
more
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because
it needs them to raise the
overall
level of
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knowledge
of the
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society
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because
of the
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important
role that information and
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knowledge
plays in world.
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the
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Government
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gives
more salary to them and
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parents
are connected
to
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teachers
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so
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children
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don&
#039; t dare to be rude to
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teachers
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
69Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
511 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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