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3) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.1

3) It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
It is irrefutable that sports have great effect on public health. Many believe that by building new sports facilities, the health of the public will improve and others believed that it would have little effect on it. They think that other facilities are also required with sports to improve the health. Indulging in sports activities helps in maintaining health and can boost up the stamina in all age groups, but self awareness, and other exercise, proper diet etc. is also necessary. I intend to discuss and give my opinion in following paragraphs. First and foremost, nowadays many sports stadiums, centres are developed to encourage all age group people to play different kinds of sports, which not only helps them to maintain their health but also increases the pride of the nation. For instance, by introducing new sports facilities in schools, collages and organizing events like table tennis tournament between the government employee of all age groups. Such activities will boost up their stamina as well as will make them healthy and active. Due to current busy lives the health of the public is deteriorating and sports facilities can provide a key solution for the government and the public. On the contrary, there are groups of people who differ from the former argument. They believe that other measures like health care, proper diet, monitory guidance for health are required along with sports facilities. As nowadays people often eat junk foods due to the current fast paced life. Children likes more of bakery items than stable diet. Thus, results in health problems like obesity in younger age. Hence, dietary chart should be followed and more health food like fresh vegetables, fruits should be consumed to maintain health. Moreover, self awareness, and other exercises like yoga, aerobics should be encouraged by older age group to prevent injury and to get a good healthy life. In the conclusion, I would like to pen down, saying that, in my opinion although by increasing the sports facilities will drastically affect in the improvement of the public health, but the other measures like health care, proper diet, routine exercise are also mandatory for healthy life.
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sports
have great effect on
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public
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health
.
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believe that by building new
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facilities, the
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health
of the
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public
will
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improve
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and others
believed that it would have
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little
effect on it. They
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think
that
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other
facilities are
also
required with
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sports
to
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improve
the
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health
. Indulging in
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sports
activities
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helps
in maintaining
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health
and can boost up the stamina in all
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age
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groups
,
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but
self awareness, and
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other
exercise, proper diet etc. is
also
necessary. I intend to discuss and give my opinion in following paragraphs.

First
and foremost, nowadays
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many
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sports
stadiums,
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centres
are developed
to encourage all
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age
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group
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people
to play
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different
kinds of
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sports
, which not
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only
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helps
them to maintain their
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health
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but
also
increases the pride of the nation.
For instance
, by introducing new
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sports
facilities in schools, collages and organizing
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events
like table tennis tournament between the
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government
employee of all
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age
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groups
. Such activities will boost up their stamina
as well
as will
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make
them healthy and active. Due to
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current
busy
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lives
the
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health
of the
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public
is deteriorating and
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sports
facilities can provide a key solution for the
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government
and the public.

On the contrary
, there are
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groups
of
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people
who differ from the former argument. They believe that
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other
measures like
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health
care, proper diet, monitory guidance for
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health
are required
along with
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sports
facilities.
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As
nowadays
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people
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often
eat junk foods due to the
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current
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fast
paced life.
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Children likes
more of bakery items than stable diet.
Thus
, results in
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health
problems like obesity in younger
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age
.
Hence
, dietary chart should
be followed
and more
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health
food like fresh vegetables, fruits should
be consumed
to maintain
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health
.
Moreover
, self awareness, and
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other
exercises like yoga, aerobics should
be encouraged
by older
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age
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group
to
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prevent
injury and to
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get
a
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good
healthy life.

In the conclusion, I would like to pen down, saying that, in my opinion although by increasing the
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sports
facilities will
drastically
affect in the improvement of the
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public
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health
,
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but
the
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other
measures like
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health
care, proper diet, routine exercise are
also
mandatory for healthy life.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 3) It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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