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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v.799

The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 799
Car has become major transportation vehicles since a long time ago. Growing economy and increasing purchasing power have made more people capable to own a private car. Although it positively contributes to human mobilization and economic development, some people argue that it is hazardous for the environment. However, considering some other valuable benefits to the environment, I think private car should not be viewed as threats. Own a private car means people has higher degree of flexibility. It helps many families to travel more convenient. They can bring all their family members in a car and then go to their favorite place on weekend. Private car has unlimited route destination. A couple could travel to far suburb locations without worrying about switching different mass transport service. Time restriction is not a problem for private car. People who own a private car would not worry about left behind of bus schedule in the morning. Private car is also an important factor in economic development. With more people own a private car, chain-effects would occur in several business sectors. Gas station, repair shop, parking space and car wash are some businesses that would be benefit from the supply of private cars. It also supports people in make a living. Home-business owners might be able to deliver their products faster and more efficiently to consumers. Compared to many years ago, there have been some serious efforts to reduce the negative impacts from cars to environment. Many automobile manufacturers produce cars with lower emission level. This would reduce pollution in the ecosystem. City government also helps to build greener environment. They build parks and plan trees that would help to balance the air pollution from gas emission. In conclusion, private car should not be viewed as a threat, rather a technological advancement that brings many substantial benefits. It contributes not only to mobilization aspect but also business growth. Although it is true private car produces negative substances, it is still reasonably can be accepted by the environment as many stakeholders show efforts to reduce such impacts.
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people
capable to
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own
a
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private
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car
. Although it
positively
contributes to human mobilization and economic development,
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some
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people
argue that it is hazardous for the
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environment
.
However
, considering
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some
other valuable benefits to the
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environment
, I
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think
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private
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car
should not
be viewed
as threats.

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Own
a
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private
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car
means
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people
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has
higher degree of flexibility. It
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helps
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many
families to travel more convenient. They can bring all their family members in a
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car
and then go to their favorite place on weekend.
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Private
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car
has unlimited route destination. A couple could travel to far suburb locations without worrying about switching
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different
mass transport service. Time restriction is not a problem for
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private
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car
.
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People
who
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own
a
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private
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car
would not worry about
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left
behind of bus schedule in the morning.

Private
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car
is
also
an
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important
factor in economic development. With more
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people
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own
a
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private
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car
, chain-effects would occur in several business sectors. Gas station, repair shop, parking space and
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car
wash are
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some
businesses that would be benefit from the supply of
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private
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cars
. It
also
supports
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people
in
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make
a living. Home-business owners might be able to deliver their products faster and more
efficiently
to consumers.

Compared to
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many
years ago, there have been
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some
serious efforts to
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reduce
the
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negative
impacts from
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cars
to
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environment
.
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Many
automobile manufacturers produce
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cars
with lower emission level. This would
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reduce
pollution in the ecosystem. City
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government
also
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helps
to build greener
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environment
. They build parks and plan trees that would
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help
to balance the air pollution from gas emission.

In conclusion
,
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private
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car
should not
be viewed
as a threat,
rather
a technological advancement that brings
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many
substantial benefits. It contributes not
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only
to mobilization aspect
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but
also
business growth. Although it is true
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private
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car
produces
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negative
substances, it is
still
reasonably
can be
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accepted
by the
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environment
as
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many
stakeholders
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show
efforts to
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reduce
such impacts.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 799

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
342 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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