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Many people like to were fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v.1

Many people like to were fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 1
It is a curious fact that people are behind modern trends and fashion concepts in the current world. The main aim of this essay is to discuss is it good to were trendy dresses. I personally suggest that it is a good idea to were modern dresses. Admittedly, fashionable dresses are the symbols of current trend. Nothing make more perfect than being individualised. Each individual has their own thought. Each one has its own right to take decisions and freedom to choose what, they actually love. To substantiate, changes in the past made the life more easy and advanced. To exemplify; in olden days people were using leaves and sac materials as their clothes. Technological improvements and ideal thoughts made the people to think practical and appropriate that helped to use dressing materials. Moreover, fashion technology have been a good take over on career improvements. Lot of people are working in this field. If we don' t support the fashion trends, it affect the job of many people. On the other hand, loss of older traditon and culture hits on the present era. Differenciation among the people lead to separation by their wealth. Some people may were fashionable clothes and others may not have the currency to buy it. It create unhappiness in the poor people and leaving a thought in their mind that they cannot afford it. Moreover, cultures in some religion dose not support female to were fashionable clothes. However, we have to change according to the society. If not, it is just like to be in before evolution. Just like how, the evolutionary theory tells. So, fashionable clothes has the important role in uptodating the newer informations and changing trends.
It is a curious fact that
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people
are behind modern
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trends
and fashion concepts in the
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current
world. The main aim of this essay is to discuss is it
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good
to were trendy dresses. I
personally
suggest that it is a
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good
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idea
to were modern dresses.

Admittedly
,
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fashionable
dresses are the symbols of
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current
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trend
. Nothing
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make
more perfect than being
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individualised
. Each individual has
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their
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own
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thought
. Each one has its
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own
right to take decisions and freedom to choose what, they actually
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love
. To substantiate,
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changes
in the past made the life more easy and advanced. To exemplify; in olden days
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people
were using
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leaves
and sac materials as their clothes. Technological improvements and ideal thoughts made the
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people
to
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think
practical and appropriate that
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helped
to
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use
dressing materials.

Moreover
, fashion technology have been a
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good
take over on career improvements. Lot of
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people
are working in this field. If we
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don&
#039; t support the fashion
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trends
, it
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affect
the job of
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many
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people
.

On the other hand
, loss of older
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traditon
and culture hits on the present era.
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Differenciation
among the
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people
lead to separation by their wealth.
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Some
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people
may were
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fashionable
clothes
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and others
may not have the currency to
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buy
it. It
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create
unhappiness in the poor
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people
and leaving a
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thought
in their mind that they cannot afford it.
Moreover
, cultures in
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some
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religion
dose not support female to were
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fashionable
clothes.

However
, we
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have to
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change
according to the society. If not, it is
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just
like to be in
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before
evolution.
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Just
like how, the evolutionary theory
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tells
.
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So
,
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fashionable
clothes has the
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important
role in
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uptodating
the newer
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informations
and changing
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trends
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people like to were fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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