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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v.657

The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 657
Private cars have both advantages and disadvantages. They have facilitated transportation while their exhaust emissions are considered as a source of pollution. However, I believe that benefits of private cars to our planet can outweigh its adverse effects. Green groups lunch campaigns against private cars because of their potential to produce green house gases, the gases that contribute in overheating of our planet. They contend that burning fossil fuels in combustion engines is damaging the natural ecosystem of our Earth and will eventually leave it as a deserted land. On the other hand, scientists have shown that industry has the greatest share, about 70%, of air pollution. Despite their ability to emit gaseous pollutants, they are major transportation means in some areas of the world. I personally can name a list of small villages and remote places in African countries that without a private car, the people only can reach the nearby cities by riding a donkey. The limited numbers of private cars they own are the only means that bring doctors, medication, teachers, books, and humanitarian helps to them. They have learnt how to treat their environment and minimize the damage to the surrounding natural habitat. In addition to their use in empowering the deprived areas, private cars can be used in exploration trips. Satellites surveying the surface of our planet are very precise and have replaced most of the exploratory trips that once were carried out by the help of private cars. However, there are still places that satellites are blind to them. Scientists have no way except to drive to those places. These expeditions are of utmost importance to protect the planes by making geo-biological maps of the Earth and finding the endangered species. In conclusion, private cars have facilitated our access to some remote areas of the world and let us to enhance the life profile in those places. They helped us to explore the surface of our planet in order to give a better protection to those areas. Therefore, I believe that private cars have not brought more harms than benefit to our planet.
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cars
have both advantages and disadvantages. They have facilitated transportation while their exhaust emissions
are considered
as a source of pollution.
However
, I believe that benefits of
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private
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cars
to our
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planet
can outweigh its adverse effects.

Green groups lunch campaigns against
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private
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cars
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because
of their potential to produce green
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house
gases, the gases that contribute in overheating of our
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planet
. They contend that burning fossil fuels in combustion engines is damaging the natural ecosystem of our Earth and will
eventually
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leave
it as a deserted land.
On the other hand
, scientists have shown that industry has the greatest share, about 70%, of air pollution.

Despite their ability to emit gaseous pollutants, they are major transportation means in
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some
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areas
of the world. I
personally
can name a list of
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small
villages and remote
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places
in African countries that without a
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private
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car
, the
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people
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only
can reach the nearby cities by riding a donkey. The limited numbers of
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private
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cars
they
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own
are the
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only
means that bring doctors, medication, teachers, books, and humanitarian
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helps
to them. They have
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learnt
how to treat their environment and minimize the damage to the surrounding natural habitat.

In addition
to their
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use
in empowering the deprived
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areas
,
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private
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cars
can be
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used
in exploration trips. Satellites surveying the surface of our
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planet
are
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very
precise and have replaced most of the exploratory trips that once
were carried
out by the
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help
of
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private
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cars
.
However
, there are
still
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places
that satellites are blind to them. Scientists have no way except to drive to those
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places
. These expeditions are of utmost importance to protect the
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planes
by making
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geo-biological
maps of the Earth and finding the endangered species.

In conclusion
,
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private
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cars
have facilitated our access to
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some
remote
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areas
of the world and
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let
us to enhance the life profile in those
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places
. They
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helped
us to explore the surface of our
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planet
in order to give a better protection to those
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areas
.
Therefore
, I believe that
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private
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cars
have not brought more harms than benefit to our
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planet
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 657

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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