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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v.340

The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 340
People are always arguing about what is more beneficial, to live in an urban town or in rural areas. Personally, I think that city residents are able to obtain more advantages such as better education rang and higher level of medical help. However, in the given essay I will discuss both views. One the one hand, I guess that the big city life can give better opportunities for its inhabitants, due to the big variety of options for education and more possibilities for employment. In other words, people able not just find an available job, they might choose the best one from the many other options. For example, Russian scientist Mikhail Lomonosov, who was born in a rural area where even school education were unavailable. Mikhail reached the destination of 1000km by foot from his village to Moscow and finally became one of the most talented Russian professors. In addition, in a countryside an urgent medical care is not always available or quality is not good enough either, because of the lack of professionals. In this case the big distance to the city can ends up with a detrimental outcome. For example, the latest news reported about the car accident outside of the city, where injured has been waiting for the medical care for 3 hours. Fortunately, that situation had the happy end and there were no victims, but this is a situation for thinking. To summarize, I have discussed the both options, but I convinced that the life in a city is much better than in a small town.
People
are always arguing about
what is more
beneficial, to
live
in an urban town or in rural areas.
Personally
, I
think
that city residents are able to obtain more advantages such as better education rang and higher level of medical
help
.
However
, in the
given
essay I will discuss both views.

One
the one hand, I guess that the
big
city life can give better opportunities for its inhabitants, due to the
big
variety of options for education and more possibilities for employment.
In other words
,
people
able not
just
find an available job, they might choose the best one from the
many
other options.
For example
, Russian scientist Mikhail
Lomonosov
, who
was born
in a rural area where even school education were unavailable. Mikhail reached the destination of
1000km
by foot from his village to Moscow and
finally
became one of the most talented Russian professors.

In addition
, in a countryside an urgent medical care is not always available or quality is not
good
enough
either,
because
of the lack of professionals.
In this case
the
big
distance to the city can ends up with a detrimental outcome.
For example
, the latest news reported about the car accident
outside of
the city, where injured has been waiting for the medical care for 3 hours.
Fortunately
, that situation had the happy
end
and there were no victims,
but
this is a situation for thinking.

To summarize
, I have discussed the both options,
but
I convinced that the life in a city is much better than in a
small
town.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The private car has brought more harm than benefits to the planet. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 340

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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