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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. v.77

The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. v. 77
Many visitors are showing their interest to visit troublesome places, like Sahara deserts or the Antartic, at the present time. Tourists could get exciting experiences from an adventurous trip, but there are many drawbacks to be taken into account. Firstly, one of the advantages of touring in challenging place is that it is full of adventure. Those who travel regularly may get bored by seeing normal tourist spots so that an adventurous journey can become a blessing for them. Secondly, an extreme place often offers the opportunity to enjoy the natural beauty closely. For example, to see the Royal Bengal Tiger in Sunderban, one might have to stay in the deep wood for a couple of days which could be very interesting but not out of danger. So, it is clear that dangerous places have many things to offer for the fearless sightseers. On the other hand, a major problem of traveling in an awkward place is that there could be no facilities for tourists. Not only the transportation is a chief problem, but also the telecommunication system is very poor in this area. For example, on the peak of the Mount Everest, if a person needs instant medical help, it will be very difficult for him to communicate to get an air ambulance. In some places, other facilities like food or security are totally difficult to provide. There is no doubt that the travelers need to be prepared mentally to face any unwanted situations. In conclusion, although some people are interested to have an adventurous journey by moving into a place where conditions are risky, its disadvantages, such as no medical support or no security, should not be ignored.
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visitors are showing their interest to visit troublesome
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places
, like Sahara deserts or the
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Antartic
, at the present time. Tourists could
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get
exciting experiences from an adventurous trip,
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but
there are
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many
drawbacks to
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into account.

Firstly
, one of the advantages of touring in challenging
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place
is that it is full of adventure. Those who travel
regularly
may
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get
bored by seeing normal tourist spots
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so
that an adventurous journey can become a blessing for them.
Secondly
, an extreme
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place
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often
offers the opportunity to enjoy the natural beauty
closely
.
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, to
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see
the Royal Bengal Tiger in
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Sunderban
, one might
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stay in the deep wood for a couple of days which could be
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very
interesting
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but
not out of
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danger
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, it is
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clear
that
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dangerous
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places
have
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many
things to offer for the fearless sightseers.

On the other hand
, a major problem of traveling in an awkward
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is that there could be no facilities for tourists. Not
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the transportation is a chief problem,
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but
also
the telecommunication system is
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very
poor in this area.
For example
, on the peak of the Mount Everest, if a person needs instant medical
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help
, it will be
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very
difficult for him to communicate to
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get
an air ambulance. In
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some
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places
, other facilities like food or security are
totally
difficult to provide. There is no doubt that the travelers need to
be prepared
mentally to face any unwanted situations.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
are interested
to have an adventurous journey by moving into a
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place
where conditions are risky, its disadvantages, such as no medical support or no security, should not be
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ignored
.
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IELTS essay The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. v. 77

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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