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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food your parents ate growing up is healthier than the food eaten now. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.189

The food your parents ate growing up is healthier than the food eaten now. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 189
Several minority languages have become extinct. Although I think that our communication will be easier if fewer languages exist in the world, I believe that it is necessary to preserve all languages. The language barrier may pose the risk of miscommunication on an important occasion. Miscommunication can lead to wars and conflicts between countries. For instance, if translators are not capable of delivering accurate messages to leaders in the diplomatic conference, this could potentially alter the decision made by their leaders. Consequently, it may create an argument at the conference. On the other hand, A language represents people's culture and heritage. It helps connect us to the past and people can understand their history by learning the language. Learning a language is to educate individuals that they can have a better understanding of their history. Also, people can gain knowledge of a new language and develop a useful skill. As a result, they can increase their employability. Furthermore, people have the responsibility to preserve languages, especially minority languages. These languages enrich the cultural diversity in our modern world. This means that if many languages die out, several unique cultures will become extinct eventually. In conclusion, I agree that fewer languages in the world make our life better. However, I firmly believe that every language should be preserved and pass it on to the next generation. Therefore, we can maintain our cultural diversity and history.
Several minority
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languages
have become extinct. Although I
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think
that our communication will be easier if fewer
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languages
exist in the world, I believe that it is necessary to preserve all languages.

The
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language
barrier may pose the
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risk
of miscommunication on an
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important
occasion. Miscommunication can lead to wars and conflicts between countries.
For instance
, if translators are not capable of delivering accurate messages to leaders in the diplomatic conference, this could
potentially
alter the decision made by their leaders.
Consequently
, it may create an argument at the conference.

On the other hand
, A
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language
represents
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people
's culture and heritage. It
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helps
connect us to the past and
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people
can understand their history by learning the
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language
. Learning a
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language
is to educate individuals that they can have a better understanding of their history.
Also
,
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people
can gain knowledge of a new
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language
and develop a useful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
.
As a result
, they can increase their employability.
Furthermore
,
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people
have the responsibility to preserve
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languages
,
especially
minority
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languages
. These
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languages
enrich the cultural diversity in our modern world. This means that if
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many
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languages
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die
out, several unique cultures will become extinct
eventually
.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that fewer
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languages
in the world
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make
our life better.
However
, I
firmly
believe that every
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language
should
be preserved
and pass it on to the
next
generation.
Therefore
, we can maintain our cultural diversity and history.
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IELTS essay The food your parents ate growing up is healthier than the food eaten now. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 189

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
234 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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