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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. v.491

The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. v. 491
" We are made of what we eat" . I read these words from an article recently in a magazine. This means that what we eat defines our life. Therefore, we must consume the best type of food for our body. Many individuals support that 50 years ago people consumed healthier food. However, in my view I definitely believe nowadays we eat healthier for than ever before for some reasons. To begin with, today food is free of pesticides. Therefore, toxic chemicals have been removed from the products we eat every day. For example, I read in the article I mentioned before that currently companies are utilizing some techniques to avoid using toxic chemicals. For example, the new introduction of crops resistant to pest. By using plants less likely to suffer from diseases, agriculturists do not feel forced to use chemicals to improve quality of crops. Thus, the discovery of this new technique minimized the use of pesticides. However, I doubt this kind of technology was available 50 years ago, yet the food we eat from agriculture today is much healthier than previous years. Moreover, the products we consume today are strictly regulated by the government. In the past, people tend to consume raw animals with plenty of sickness. For example, years ago people ate pork by hunting or rising at home. Nevertheless, today, the government has laws to protect costumer from diseases. For example, as a veterinarian student, I had to learn the laws to raise pork and cattle. I know from experience that animals which are not raised properly to eat must be sacrificed and burned as a safe protocol. All these laws are recent, and thus many individuals in the past were tended to suffer more from animal-transmitted diseases. Another way we differ from our ancestors in the way we eat is the fact that we have more knowledge about eating habits. The information thanks to the technology is easier to spread out. For example, I read an article in the newspaper about health each day. Through this I grasp information about what to eat. Consequently, I avoid eating fast food or any harmful type of food that it is described there. I am sure 30 years ago people did not have the accessibility to this information as we do now. To sum up, for all my reasons above, I concur that people today have better food habits than ever before. Moreover, scientists will continue investigating about this discussion in order to improve our quality of life.
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I read these words from an article recently in a magazine. This means that what we
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eat
defines our life.
Therefore
, we
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must
consume the best type of
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food
for our body.
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Many
individuals support that 50 years ago
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people
consumed healthier
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food
.
However
, in my view I definitely believe nowadays we
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eat
healthier for than ever
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before
for
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some
reasons.

To
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begin
with,
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today
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food
is free of pesticides.
Therefore
, toxic chemicals have
been removed
from the products we
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eat
every day. For
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example
, I read in the article I mentioned
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before
that
currently
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companies
are utilizing
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some
techniques to avoid using toxic chemicals. For
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example
, the new introduction of crops resistant to pest. By using plants less likely to suffer from diseases, agriculturists do not feel forced to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
chemicals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
quality of crops.
Thus
, the discovery of this new technique minimized the
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use
of pesticides.
However
, I doubt this kind of technology was available 50 years ago,
yet
the
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food
we
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eat
from agriculture
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today
is much healthier than previous years.

Moreover
, the products we consume
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today
are
strictly
regulated by the
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government
. In the past,
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people
tend to consume raw animals with
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plenty
of sickness. For
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example
, years ago
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people
ate pork by hunting or rising at home.
Nevertheless
,
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today
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has laws to protect costumer from diseases. For
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
example
, as a veterinarian student, I had to learn the laws to raise pork and cattle. I know from experience that animals which are not raised
properly
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be sacrificed
and burned as a safe protocol. All these laws are recent, and
thus
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
individuals in the past
were tended
to suffer more from animal-transmitted diseases.

Another way we differ from our ancestors in the way we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
is the fact that we have more knowledge about eating habits. The information thanks to the technology is easier to spread out. For
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
example
, I read an article in the newspaper about health each day. Through this I grasp information about what to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eat
.
Consequently
, I avoid eating
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
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food
or any harmful type of
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food
that it is
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described
there. I am sure 30 years ago
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people
did not have the accessibility to this information as we do
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now
.

To sum up, for all my reasons above, I concur that
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people
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today
have better
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food
habits than ever
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before
.
Moreover
, scientists will continue investigating about this discussion in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
our quality of life.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. v. 491

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
420 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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