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Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give r v.3

Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give r v. 3
In recent decades, children spend a great deal of time for using computers. I think this trend has both advantages and disadvantages. This essay will discuss the main benefits which help them save time, have good jobs as well and follows by a main disadvantage, such as expensive cost. On the one hand, there are many benefits which lead to increase in using computer time in schools. First, since computers can support student in looking for information, users will save much time. In fact, with a laptop, which connected to the Internet, users have access to various websites in order to get more information, such as science, polities and so on, without going to physical libraries, which improve their productivities. Second, in order to become competitive in the labor market, computer skills are great importance. This means that, nowadays, companies require their employees to master at using different software, like Microsoft Word, PowerPoint or so forth, students spend their time to improve using computer abilities to have decent jobs. On the other hand, a main drawback of this trend is expensive cost. By investing a computer for each student, this will put more burden on school budgets. This means that, school needs to fund properly for many fields, such as school building, scholarship which implies that buying computers are not afforded. For instance, according to Ngouyen high school, which is the biggest school in Dongnai province, in 2018, they spent 35% of the budget for renewing computers just for 9th grade. In conclusion, the advantages of spending time for using computers are saving time for searching information, improvement kills as well, while expensive fees are considered as a disadvantage. I strongly recommend that, children and school should consider all the pros and cons and make the best way to balance between improved study result and school budget.
In recent decades, children spend a great deal of
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time
for using computers. I
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think
this trend has both advantages and disadvantages. This essay will discuss the main benefits which
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help
them save
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time
, have
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good
jobs
as well
and follows by a main disadvantage, such as expensive cost.

On the one hand, there are
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many
benefits which lead to increase in using computer
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time
in
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schools
.
First
, since computers can support student in looking for information, users will save much
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time
. In fact, with a laptop, which connected to the Internet, users have access to various websites in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more information, such as science, polities and
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so
on, without going to physical libraries, which
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improve
their
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productivities
. Second, in order to become competitive in the labor market, computer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are great importance. This means that, nowadays,
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companies
require their employees to master at using
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different
software, like Microsoft Word, PowerPoint or
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so
forth, students spend their
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time
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
using computer abilities to have decent jobs.

On the other hand
, a main drawback of this trend is expensive cost. By investing a computer for each student, this will put more burden on
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school
budgets. This means that,
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school
needs to fund
properly
for
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many
fields, such as
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school
building, scholarship which implies that buying computers are not afforded.
For instance
, according to
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Ngouyen
high
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school
, which is the biggest
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school
in
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Dongnai
province, in 2018, they spent 35% of the budget for renewing computers
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just
for 9th grade.

In conclusion
, the advantages of spending
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time
for using computers are saving
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time
for searching information, improvement kills
as well
, while expensive fees
are considered
as a disadvantage. I
strongly
recommend that, children and
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school
should consider all the pros and cons and
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make
the best way to balance between
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improved
study result and
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school
budget.
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IELTS essay Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. with this? What role should traditions have in our lives? Give r v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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