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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Primary school teachers should not give children (aged 5-10) assignments for more than 30 minutes, because there are enough instructions to learn in regular school classes. v.734

Primary school teachers should not give children (aged 5-10) assignments for more than 30 minutes, because there are enough instructions to learn in regular school classes. v. 734
Learning is the complicated ability to uderstanding and evaluating our environment, which is available just in primates and human beings. The learning process would be occure in family and society. Based on any individual' s brain processing, there are various methods to be thought and induced the learning. Based on my experience, I beleieve that it is important to repeat the any learning stuff to reach high efficient accomplishments. Teaching children in 5-10 aged in elementry school should be in coincidence with their ability to learn and golden time to achieve the goals of learning. Hence, I agree that there is not necessary to give children assignments for more than 30 minutes and I believe it is true because of some reasons. I would clarify my two important reasons in below paragraphs. First and foremost, children in 5-10 ages are impatient to repeat a specific duty for more than 30 minutes and elongation of assignments more than this duration would decrease their focus and concentration in learning process. Concentration declining will impetus not only distraction but also misconception. For instance, I can remember my math asssignments in primary school which solving its problem would elongated 2 hours. It was really tough for me to stay on back of my table and write math formula to solve and finish my assignments. Most of the time, first page of problems was solved in correct way; however, rest of my math assignment pages was full of mistakes and misconception of syllabus of our lessons. As a result, this indicates a viciouse cycle of elongated assignments that has not efficiency in learning process, also causes reduction learning ability and induces misunderstanding, soaring mistakes repeatition, and bad effects on students impetus in school. Moreover, instructions in primary schools are the best sources of new methods based on recent psychological thesis about children learning abilities and how to make them be persistent in learning process by repeatitive short assignments. primary school students would be eager and curious about new things, if their teachers implement new and valid methods to teach and encourage them during school time. Furthermore, short and wise assignments for children employ children' s conception to learn more than before; the more new challenges, the more new ways to learn. It would be teach childrens to set their future goals and work harder to be successful, if their learning process become regular and enhance their preseverence. Therefore, this positive cycle induce the eagerness of childrens to work harder and learn new abilities during their not only short but also enjoyful assignments, so keen students would be more successful in their schools and responsible for any aspects of future life. All in all, good instruction in regular school classes would help teachers in primary schools to reduce the assignments duration for children about 30 minutes because it would inhibits the misconception and losing focus between students. Additionally, these kind of methods spure eagerness to learn more and also induce successful accomplishments in school and future life of students.
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ability
to
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uderstanding
and evaluating our environment, which is available
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just
in primates and human beings. The
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learning
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process
would be
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occure
in family and society.

Based on any
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individual&
#039; s brain processing, there are various
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methods
to be
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thought
and induced the
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learning
. Based on my experience, I
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beleieve
that it is
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important
to repeat the any
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learning
stuff to reach high efficient accomplishments.

Teaching
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children
in 5-10 aged in
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elementry
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school
should be in coincidence with their
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ability
to
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learn
and golden time to achieve the goals of
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learning
.
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, I
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agree
that there is not necessary to give
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children
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assignments
for more than 30 minutes and I believe it is true
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because
of
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reasons.

I would clarify my two
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important
reasons in below paragraphs.

First
and foremost,
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children
in 5-10 ages are impatient to repeat a specific duty for more than 30 minutes and elongation of
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assignments
more than this duration would decrease their focus and concentration in
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learning
process.

Concentration declining will impetus not
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only
distraction
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but
also
misconception.
For instance
, I can remember my math
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asssignments
in primary
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school
which solving its problem would
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elongated
2 hours. It was
really
tough for me to stay on back of my table and write math formula to solve and finish my assignments.

Most of the time,
first
page of problems
was solved
in correct way;
however
, rest of my math
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assignment
pages was full of mistakes and misconception of syllabus of our lessons.

As a result
, this indicates a
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viciouse
cycle of elongated
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assignments
that has not efficiency in
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learning
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process
,
also
causes reduction
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learning
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ability
and induces misunderstanding, soaring mistakes
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repeatition
, and
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bad
effects on
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students
impetus in school.

Moreover
, instructions in primary
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schools
are the best sources of
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new
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methods
based on recent psychological thesis about
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children
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learning
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abilities
and how to
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make
them be persistent in
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learning
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process
by
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repeatitive
short assignments.

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primary
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school
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students
would be eager and curious about
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new
things, if their teachers implement
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new
and valid
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methods
to teach and encourage them during
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school
time.
Furthermore
, short and wise
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assignments
for
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children
employ
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children&
#039; s conception to
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learn
more than
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before
; the more
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new
challenges, the more
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new
ways to learn.

It would be
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teach
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childrens
to set their future goals and work harder to be successful, if their
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learning
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process
become regular and enhance their
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preseverence
.
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, this
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positive
cycle induce the eagerness of
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childrens
to work harder and
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learn
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new
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abilities
during their not
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only
short
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but
also
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enjoyful
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assignments
,
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so
keen
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students
would be more successful in their
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schools
and responsible for any aspects of future life.

All in all,
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good
instruction in regular
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school
classes would
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help
teachers in primary
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schools
to
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reduce
the
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assignments
duration for
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children
about 30 minutes
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because
it would
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inhibits
the misconception and losing focus between
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students
.
Additionally
,
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these kind
of
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methods
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spure
eagerness to
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learn
more and
also
induce successful accomplishments in
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school
and future life of
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students
.
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62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS essay Primary school teachers should not give children (aged 5-10) assignments for more than 30 minutes, because there are enough instructions to learn in regular school classes. v. 734

Essay
  American English
12 paragraphs
503 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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