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Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings, unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. Do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.4

Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings, unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. v. 4
Using animals for the benefit of human beings is a heated topic for decades. The discussion on using animals and performing experiments on animals is a common topic on debates but none of them given the proven results if the animals should be used or not for the human benefits. I support the statement that animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings without the evidence that the animals don’t suffer in any way. Firstly, animal rights are violated whenever they are used for any research and experiments. Scientists/ medical experts performed experiments on animals for medicines and for other medical purposes. By such kind of experiments, most of the time animal goes through the lot of pain and sometimes it leads to their deaths. As human needs love and support, similarly animals need the love and support from us. Human beings should adopt animals and make them their part of family instead of using their lives for other benefits. On the other side, many of the renowned brand uses animal species for the designer bags and clothes. These designers are earning a hefty amount for such kind of designer apparels and accessories. We humans do not think before buying or using clothes and bags which is made up of animal skins instead human beings are ready to pay huge amount for these fashion materials. To conclude the above, human beings should not use animals for medical experiment, researches and other benefits which is harmful for animals. We human beings should aware of animal rights and should support the animal welfare in order to decrease the animal suffering.
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for the
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benefit
of
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human
beings is a heated topic for decades. The discussion on using
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animals
and performing
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experiments
on
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animals
is a common topic on debates
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but
none of them
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given
the proven results if the
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animals
should be
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used
or not for the
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human
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benefits
. I
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support
the statement that
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animals
should not be
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used
for the
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benefit
of
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human
beings without the evidence that the
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animals
don’t suffer in any way.

Firstly
,
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animal
rights
are violated
whenever they are
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used
for any research and
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experiments
. Scientists/ medical experts performed
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experiments
on
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animals
for medicines and for
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other
medical purposes. By such kind of
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experiments
, most of the time
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animal
goes through the lot of pain and
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sometimes
it leads to their deaths. As
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human
needs
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love
and
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support
,
similarly
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animals
need the
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love
and
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support
from us.
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Human
beings should adopt
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animals
and
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make
them their part of family
instead
of using their
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lives
for
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other
benefits.

On the
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side,
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many
of the renowned brand
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uses
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animal
species for the designer bags and clothes. These designers are earning a hefty amount for such kind of designer apparels and accessories. We
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humans
do not
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think
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before
buying or using clothes and bags which
is made
up of
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animal
skins
instead
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human
beings are ready to pay huge amount for these fashion materials.

To conclude
the above,
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human
beings should not
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use
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animals
for medical
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experiment
, researches and
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other
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benefits
which is harmful for
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animals
. We
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human
beings should aware of
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animal
rights and should
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support
the
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animal
welfare in order to decrease the
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animal
suffering.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Animals should not be used for the benefit of human beings, unless there is evidence that the animals do not suffer in any way. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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