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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. v.72

People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. v. 72
These days, certain mothers and fathers squeeze own offspring to be individual and get success to find niche in these lives. The main motivation of this pressing is not to encounter what mothers and fathers have had in their entire life. Furthermore, mom and dad prevent to making potential mistake. Everyone wants to see offspring as individual leader, businessman, singer, writer, politic and ect. However, certain parents want to influence their children. Some children really need support, advice before doing something vitally important in their life like a choosing a university and specialization because of lack of experience. In this way parents lay the foundation and prepare their offspring for adulthood. Because of mothers and fathers control most of people became squeeze and had played the crucial role. On the other hand, children have teenage period where they feel freedom, where they debate with parents and do not want to listen. Moreover, when parents and kids have a dispute kids prefer to run away from home instead of solving. This is very a sensitive situation and parents should be more open minded with the kids and explain the whole scenario, share own experience. Everyone is individual and approach to them have to be special. Certain parents are dictators and they require more and more from the offspring. Which will be psychological trauma for entire life. When the kids became an adult they grew up hateful and can commit to crime. To conclude, the role of parents in the life of children is acute. Some kids think that too much demand some of them not. Each control can be prevented differently depending on how it is presented.
These days, certain mothers and fathers squeeze
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own
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offspring
to be individual and
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get
success to find niche in these
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lives
. The main motivation of this pressing is not to encounter what mothers and fathers have had in their entire
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life
.
Furthermore
, mom and dad
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prevent
to making potential mistake.

Everyone wants to
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see
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offspring
as individual leader, businessman, singer, writer, politic and
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ect
.
However
, certain
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parents
want to influence their
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children
.
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Some
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children
really
need support, advice
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before
doing something
vitally
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important
in their
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life
like a choosing a university and specialization
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because
of lack of experience. In this way
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parents
lay the foundation and prepare their
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offspring
for adulthood.
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Because
of mothers and fathers control most of
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people
became squeeze and had played the crucial role.

On the other hand
,
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children
have teenage period where they feel freedom, where they debate with
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parents
and do not want to listen.
Moreover
, when
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parents
and
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kids
have a dispute
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kids
prefer to run away from home
instead
of solving. This is
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very
a sensitive situation and
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parents
should be more
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open minded
with the
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kids
and
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explain
the whole scenario, share
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own
experience. Everyone is individual and approach to them
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have to
be special. Certain
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parents
are
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dictators and
they require more and more from the
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offspring
. Which will be psychological trauma for entire
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life
. When the
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kids
became an adult they grew up hateful and can commit to crime.

To conclude
, the role of
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parents
in the
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life
of
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children
is acute.
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Some
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kids
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think
that too much demand
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some
of them not. Each control can be
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prevented
differently
depending on how it
is presented
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer. v. 72

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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