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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.693

Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 693
Learning a foreign language is very important in our society. In order to travel abroad, you have to learn another language that helps you to communicate in vacation or work at that country. because of that, some people would agree that learning a second language for children is essential at early stages. Others would diagree. In my view, I believe that It is not good to learn a foreign language as soon as they start school for two imperative reasons. To begin with, children don' t have choice to choose a language they need in school. When school required from children to choose a language, they don' t have that experience to choose a language that they really need in their future. Take myself as an example, when i was in elementery school, all students have to learn a second language, without thinking, I preferred to take french language class since I like the French movies. When I graduated, I realized that this was a wrong decision, for I need to learn English or Korean language that helps me to get a good job in the united states. If I had chose a popular language, I had have opportunity to get a good job. This experience taught me that children have not choose a language at early stage. Hence, in addition to a wrong decision, children won' t learn in a correct way. Because instructors that learn a language are beginner, they will not teach the language as native speaker. For instance, my friend got a job in sewedn, but he didn' t speak its language. Although he took their language when he was child, he didn' t communicate well when he traveled and settled there. In fact, he suffered a lot to understand the people over there, but after one year, he speaks as native speaker which is amazing. In contrast, when you learn a language, you may not improve the language well because you will not practice it everyday. As we clearly can see that learning language at childhood is not a good idea. By way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I don' t concur that learning a second language in early life of children won' t benefit for them. All we should pay attention for when our kids could learn a foreign language.
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important
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have to
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learn
another
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language
that
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helps
you to communicate in vacation or work at that country.
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children
is essential at early stages. Others would
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. In my view, I believe that It is not
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good
to
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learn
a foreign
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language
as
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soon
as they
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start
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school
for two imperative reasons.

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begin
with,
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children
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, they
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that they
really
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i
was in
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elementery
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school
, all students
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have to
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learn
a second
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language
, without thinking, I preferred to take
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french
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language
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since I like the French movies. When I graduated, I realized that this was a
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decision, for I need to
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learn
English or Korean
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language
that
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helps
me to
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get
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good
job in the
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. If I had
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language
, I had
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have
opportunity to
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a
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job. This experience taught me that
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children
have not
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a
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language
at early stage.

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in a correct way
.
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instructors that
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are beginner, they will not teach the
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language
as native speaker.
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, my friend
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a job in
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sewedn
,
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. Although he took their
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when he was child, he
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didn&
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over there,
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after one year, he speaks as native speaker which is amazing.
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, you may not
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at childhood is not a
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.

By way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I
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learning
a second
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language
in early life of
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children
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won&
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learn
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51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS essay Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 693

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
388 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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