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Do agree or disagree? when teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work a lone on projects. v.6

Do agree or disagree? when teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work a lone on projects. v. 6
Education plays a pivotal role in building our communities. It broadens our opportunity to land a good job, and it determines our success. So, to teach students effectively, teachers may assign group projects. It is a highly debated issue whether or not students learn more effectvely together than working a lone, and this topic can be approached from many angles due to its complexity. Deeply deliberating over the issue, I believe working as a group will benefit student and they learn quickly and effectively, and following discussion reveals my stand and reasoning. First, working as a group is motivating. Through working with others, students would be excited to finish their project fast since each one would collect information and this makes other students to compete with each other. For example, three weeks ago, I read an article about the good ways to learn students and in an effective methods. In fact, the author asserts that working in a group would motivate student to study hard and they may compete with each other so they work diligently. Actually, the writer illustrates a study about this aspect. In the study, the researchers asked students to work in a report, some of them worked as a group and the others worked a lone. The results were astonishing for them because the students who worked as a group learn more and so fast, they were motivated. However, the students who worked a lone made a lot of mistakes on the materials and they were too slow since working a lone is boring. As we can clearly see, working in a group is an effecient way to learn more effectively. Second, students can learn from each other when working in a group. In order for students to get more information that is related to their topic, they can learn from each other because some students are bright and have a lot of information that not all students know about it. Take myself as an example, when I was in pharmacy school, our professor asked us to do research about carcinogenics drugs and the aspects of clinical drugs. In fact, I had trouble understanding in the mechanism of these drugs so I worked with a group and one of members of the group is astute. After discussion with the group, he helped me to understand that topic because he had a lot of resources that I didn' t know about them so I expanded my knowledge and I got a good grade. Frankly, I was able to distinguish between the important information and less one. This experience taught me that we can expand our knowledge when working in a group. By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I firmly concur that working in a team would a great way for students to learn effectively. We should work together because it is worthwhile and specious.
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projects. It is a
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debated issue
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learn
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effectvely
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, and this topic can
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angles due to its complexity.
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deliberating over the issue, I believe
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working
as a
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group
will benefit
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student and
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learn
quickly
and
effectively
, and following discussion reveals my stand and reasoning.

First
,
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as a
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is motivating. Through
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with others,
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would
be excited
to finish their project
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since each one would collect
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and in an effective
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methods
. In fact, the author asserts that
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in a
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would motivate
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to study
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hard and
they may compete with each
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. The results were astonishing for them
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more and
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materials and
they were too slow since
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know about it. Take myself as an example, when I was in pharmacy school, our professor asked us to do research about carcinogenics drugs and the aspects of clinical drugs. In fact, I had trouble understanding in the mechanism of these drugs
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so
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and one of members of the
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is astute. After discussion with the
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, he
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and less one. This experience taught me that we can expand our knowledge when
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in a group.

By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I
firmly
concur that
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in a team would a great way for
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students
to
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learn
effectively
. We should work together
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it is worthwhile and specious.
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IELTS essay Do agree or disagree? when teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work a lone on projects. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
482 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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