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Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People learn things better from those at their own level - such as fellow students or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reason v.12

Essay topics: People learn things better from those at their own level - such as fellow students or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reason v. 12
People through their life learn a lot of things in work, university and even in home. In order to be a successful person, we should know about many things so we can be an effective person in the life. Some times, we learn things from those at same level such as students and co workers which is easy to learn from them, but personally, I think learning from those of a higher lever such as teachers or supervisors is more valuable and better for two imperative reasons. To begin with, educationally speaking, teachers teach important information and they have a lot of experience. Through asking a teacher, a student will have the opportunity to get the essential information for his education that helps him to get a good grade. Take myself as an example, when I was in pharmacy school, I had trouble in clinical pharmacy which was very difficult and I got low score, as a result, I asked my classmate to explain to me some of aspects and chapters in carcinogenic drugs. In fact, he was very helpful and he supported me, but he didn' t have knowledge about these drugs so I depended on his explanation and I took a test after one month from studying with my friend, but guess what, I failed and I was very frustrated about that. Then I asked my professor and he cleared up to me every thing about the class and even he gave me some tips to pass the coures. I do remember he focused on the important information and I got a good grade. If I didn' t ask my teacher, I couldn' t have passed this class. This experience taught me that students should ask their professor if they have any question because they have experience and knowledge. Second, socially speaking, older people have a lot of previouse things to give the young people and they have a lot of advice since they have learned many things in their life. It is well known that older people did a lot of mistakes in their life and they have lessons from their life that youngsters should take their advice and suggestions. For instance, three years ago, my sister graduated from medical school and they hired her in a big hospital. Actually, she was new there and she couldn' t understand every things about her job, and she struggled at first. Working as a doctor is challenging but she asked her boss so he helped her a lot. She told me that he is devoted and eager and he endorsed her a lot and this strengthen her job significantly. In addition, she has learned skills that others couldn' learn from co workers. As we can clearly see, my sister has learned a lot of beneficial skills form her supervisor. By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I firmly concur that learning from higher level has many advantages and we should benefit from this since it is worthwhile and specious.
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People
through their
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life
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learn
a
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lot
of things in work, university and even in home. In order to be a successful person, we should know about
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many
things
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so
we can be an effective person in the
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life
.
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Some
times, we
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learn
things from those at same level such as students and
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co workers
which is easy to
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learn
from them,
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but
personally
, I
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think
learning from those of a higher lever such as
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teachers
or supervisors is more valuable and better for two imperative reasons.

To
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begin
with,
educationally
speaking,
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teachers
teach
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important
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information and
they have a
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lot
of experience. Through asking a
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teacher
, a student will have the opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the essential information for his education that
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helps
him to
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get
a
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good
grade. Take myself as an example, when I was in pharmacy school, I had trouble in clinical pharmacy which was
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very
difficult and I
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got
low score,
as a result
, I asked my classmate to
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explain
to me
After 'some of', you should use 'the' ("some of the aspects") or simply say "some aspects".
some of aspects
and chapters in carcinogenic drugs. In fact, he was
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very
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helpful and
he supported me,
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but
he
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didn&
#039; t have knowledge about these drugs
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so
I depended on his explanation and I took a
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test
after one month from studying with my friend,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
guess what, I
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failed and
I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
frustrated about that. Then I asked my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
professor and
he cleared up to me every thing about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
and even he gave me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
tips to pass the
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coures
. I do remember he focused on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
information and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a
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good
grade. If I
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didn&
#039; t ask my
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teacher
, I
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couldn&
#039; t have passed this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. This experience taught me that students should ask their professor if they have any question
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because
they have experience and knowledge.

Second,
socially
speaking, older
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people
have a
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lot
of
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previouse
things to give the young
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people and
they have a
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lot
of advice since they have learned
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
things in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. It is well known that older
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people
did a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lot
of mistakes in their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
life and
they have lessons from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
that youngsters should take their advice and suggestions.
For instance
, three years ago, my sister graduated from medical
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
school and
they hired her in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
hospital. Actually, she was new
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
there and
she
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couldn&
#039; t understand every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "thing"?
things
about her job, and she struggled at
first
. Working as a doctor is challenging
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
she asked her boss
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so
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
her a
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lot
. She
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told
me that he
is devoted
and
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eager and
he endorsed her a
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lot
and this strengthen her job
significantly
.
In addition
, she has learned
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that others
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couldn&
#039;
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learn
from
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
co workers
. As we can
clearly
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see
, my sister has learned a
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lot
of beneficial
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skills
form her supervisor.

By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I
firmly
concur that learning from higher level has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
advantages and
we should benefit from this since it is worthwhile and specious.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: People learn things better from those at their own level - such as fellow students or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reason v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
504 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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