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3. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

3. Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
parents are a very important part of our lives. They sacrifice their life for our happiness and successful as well as they are the only people who take care of us without anything. Some people would agree that classmate are influnce more than parents on a child' s success in school. Others would disagree. In my view, classmates have a very imperative affect on child' s success in school for two essential reasons. The main reason is that when a child contacts with a bright classmate will help him to get an immense information. This is will create a good competition between them which is extremely benefit to both of them. For example, when I was in elementary school, i had a friend who was astute and i really like to get along with her. Sometimes, i was tedious from studying and i didn' t study well but i saw my friend studying hard, this actually make me act energetic and study with him. In addition, when i had any difficult question i ask her and she answer me clearly. This relationship support me and lead me to get an amazing grade in my school. As you see, this experience taught me that when i have a good friend that allow me to take a good advantages to get a tremendous habit to study. Secondly, a hard studying classmate encourage the child to study well as well as motivate him. A good classmate push his friend to study and if he feels that his friend is not study well he will talk to his parent. In fact this method wil help him to give parents idea for their child in school. For instance, i read a book about how could the parents push their child to study hard. It is a very intersting book that learn parents the real way to keep their child in the right track. The author asserts that classmates have a positive impact on the child behavior and success in school. The book avers to the parents that they have to choose their child' s friend. This book helps me to be careful for how i have take care of my child' s friend. In sum, the classmate are very effective to our children. Not only encourge them but also motivate them to succed. So, all parents have to pay attention for their chilrens' friends.
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life
for our happiness and successful as
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classmate
are
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more than
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on a
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school
. Others would disagree. In my view,
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classmates
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very
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on
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school
for two essential reasons.

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child
contacts with a bright
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classmate
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help
him to
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get
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an immense information
. This is will create a
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good
competition between them which is
extremely
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benefit
to both of them.
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, when I was in elementary
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school
,
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i
had a
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friend
who was astute and
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i
really
like to
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get
along with her.
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,
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i
was tedious from studying and i
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didn&
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study
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well
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but
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i
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saw
my
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friend
studying
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hard
, this actually
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make
me act energetic and
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study
with him.
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, when
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i
had any difficult question
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i
ask
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her and
she answer me
clearly
. This relationship support me and lead me to
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get
an amazing grade in my
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school
. As you
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see
, this experience taught me that when
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i
have a
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good
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friend
that
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allow
me to take a
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good
advantages to
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get
a tremendous habit to study.

Secondly
, a
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hard
studying
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classmate
encourage the
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child
to
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study
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well
as
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well
as motivate him. A
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good
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classmate
push his
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friend
to
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study
and if he feels that his
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friend
is not
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study
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well
he will talk to his
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parent
. In fact this method
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wil
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parents
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idea
for their
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child
in
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school
.
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,
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i
read a
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book
about how could the
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parents
push their
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child
to
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study
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hard
. It is a
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very
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intersting
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book
that learn
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parents
the real way to
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keep
their
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child
in the right
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track
. The author asserts that
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classmates
have a
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positive
impact on the
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child
behavior and success in
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school
. The
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book
avers to the
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parents
that they
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choose their
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friend
. This
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book
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helps
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how
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i
have take care of my
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child&
#039; s friend.

In sum, the
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classmate
are
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very
effective to our children. Not
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only
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encourge
them
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also
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succed
.
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, all
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parents
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pay attention for their
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chilrens&
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friends
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Mistakes

IELTS essay 3. Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
399 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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