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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are old enough to do so. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.69

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are old enough to do so. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 69
It is believed that carry bags made up of plastic materials should be banned due to its major contribution towards polluting soil and the ocean. Owing to this, some people deem that it should be prohibited. I am in accord with the statement and this essay will also discuss the possible reasons. To commence with, once the plastic starts to get amalgamated with the soil, it will remain in the ecosystem of the land because it is non-biodegradable. As a result, the fertility of particular land will be reduced and eventually make it futile. Additionally, if plastic is burnt, then it will release harmful chemicals such create perilous eventualities for every living organism. So, it should be banned. Furthermore, land animals cannot digest the plastic materials. So, they will suffer from various diseases, if they eat plastic. For example, according to one survey, more than half of population of land animals is dying due to plastic eating. Hence, it can be substantiated that plastic should be excluded. Moreover, Marine lives will face danger because plastic will not only decrease the oxygen level in the sea but will also cause harm to their habitats and on top of that marine lives will also die due to the habit of eating plastic. In addition to that, it should be banned due to the lack of awareness amidst people. To illustrate, people always throw plastic trash in the oceans that gradually contaminates it. Therefore, it is justifiable that plastic materials should be prohibited. However, instead of stopping its production, it should be recycled due to various reasons. Firstly, it is easy to carry because of its light weight. Secondly, it is cheaper than any other materials as well as easily available. To exemplify, shopping centres always charge more for paper bags and less for plastic bags. Though, I uphold the notion that plastic materials should be banned. In conclusion, agglomerating all the above mentioned points, I believe that it should be forbidden because of its devastating implications for nature and it is recommended that researchers should find ways to recycle it.
It
is believed
that carry bags made up of
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plastic
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materials
should
be banned
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due
to its major contribution towards polluting soil and the ocean. Owing to this,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
deem that it should
be prohibited
. I am in accord with the statement and this essay will
also
discuss the possible reasons.

To commence with, once the
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plastic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
to
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get
amalgamated with the soil, it will remain in the ecosystem of the
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land
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is non-biodegradable.
As a result
, the fertility of particular
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land
will be
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reduced
and
eventually
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make
it futile.
Additionally
, if
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plastic
is burnt
, then it will release harmful chemicals such create perilous eventualities for every living organism.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, it should
be banned
.
Furthermore
,
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land
animals cannot digest the
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plastic
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materials
.
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So
, they will suffer from various diseases, if they eat
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plastic
.
For example
, according to one survey, more than half of population of
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land
animals is dying
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due
to
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plastic
eating.
Hence
, it can
be substantiated
that
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plastic
should
be excluded
.

Moreover
, Marine
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lives
will face
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danger
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because
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plastic
will not
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only
decrease the oxygen level in the sea
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but
will
also
cause harm to their habitats and
on top of that
marine
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lives
will
also
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die
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due
to the habit of eating
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plastic
.
In addition
to that, it should
be banned
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due
to the lack of awareness amidst
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. To illustrate,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
always throw
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plastic
trash in the oceans that
gradually
contaminates it.
Therefore
, it is justifiable that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
should
be prohibited
.

However
,
instead
of stopping its production, it should
be recycled
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to various reasons.
Firstly
, it is easy to carry
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its light weight.
Secondly
, it is cheaper than any other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
as well
as
easily
available. To exemplify, shopping
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centres
always charge more for paper bags and less for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
bags.
“Though” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Though
, I uphold the notion that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
materials
should
be banned
.

In conclusion
, agglomerating all the above mentioned points, I believe that it should
be forbidden
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its devastating implications for nature and it
is recommended
that researchers should find ways to recycle it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are old enough to do so. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 69

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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