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Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v.2

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 2
As time goes by, parents have less and less time to spend at home with their children because of their working pressure & schedules. Lots of people think that it should be better to teach their children to do house works, so they could do household tasks more rapidly and especially together and can prepare for the upcoming days. I think that is right to teach children to do house works and I will discuss this topic in the next paragraphs. The reason why children should learn how to do household tasks is that it will become extremely useful to them in the future. In fact, learning to do the house works will prepare children to adult life. Furthermore, the fact that children can contribute to household tasks is a concrete help for their parents and a reason of pride. Parents should firstly teach to their children to complete easy tasks such as removing dust or washing their toys. Secondly, children could give some help with gardening or take care of pets, which are tasks that require interest and more attention. Finally, young boys and girls could use the hoover or the dishwasher. The most important aspect of teaching how to do house works is to make them easy-to-do and even amusing if possible. To conclude, people who don't believe that their children are able to do household tasks are completely wrong and have to change their mind even if they hadn't been required to do house works when they were children too.
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people
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think
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to do
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works,
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they could do
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household
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tasks
more
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and
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together and can prepare for the upcoming days. I
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think
that is
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children
to do
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works and I will discuss this topic in the
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paragraphs.

The reason why
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children
should learn how to do
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household
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tasks
is that it will become
extremely
useful to them in the future. In fact, learning to do the
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house
works will prepare
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children
to adult life.
Furthermore
, the fact that
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children
can contribute to
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household
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tasks
is a concrete
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help
for their parents and a reason of pride.

Parents should
firstly
teach to their
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children
to complete easy
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tasks
such as removing dust or washing their toys.
Secondly
,
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children
could give
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some
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help
with gardening or take care of pets, which are
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tasks
that require interest and more attention.
Finally
, young boys and girls could
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use
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the hoover
or the dishwasher. The most
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important
aspect of teaching how to do
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house
works is to
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make
them easy-to-do and even amusing if possible.

To conclude
,
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people
who don't believe that their
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children
are able to do
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household
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tasks
are completely
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wrong
and
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have to
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change
their mind even if they hadn't
been required
to do
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house
works when they were
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children
too.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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