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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v.11

Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 11
Nowadays, in modern families, doing housework is regarded as solely parents’ responsibilities and therefore, children rarely participate in this process. However, other people believe that kids should be involved in household tasks when they are capable of. From my point of view, I strongly agree with this statement due to the following reasons. To begin with, doing housework establishes close-knit relationship with family members. There is an old saying that: “Action speaks louder than words”. It means that your saying “love” to your parents daily is not as meaningful as your work to help your parents”. It is certain that parents are always exhausted after a long working, therefore, children should help parents so they have more time to relax. For example, youngster just need to do domestic chores such as sweeping the house or washing dishes can makes their parents avoid having an argument as parents derive too much pressure and tiredness from their work. More importantly, children can derive much essential social skills from doing household chores. Children raise awareness that they have responsibilities to do those things and enhance skills like time management and independence. They have to arrange it scientifically to balance the time between learning and doing housework. For instance, when children became an adult, they could solely make breakfast and run their family. Additionally, doing housework is beneficial to their future. Everyone has to grow up and cannot depend on parents forever. Thus, children need to get used to those activities that they may face in the future in order to take favorable care of themselves. As a result, they will find it easier to live independently when they are mature. In conclusion, doing housework exist many benefits that meet a need in the future. Therefore, it is imperative that parents should encourage children to do domestic work as soon as possible just for the sake of themselves.
Nowadays, in modern families,
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doing
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housework
is regarded
as
solely
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parents’
responsibilities and
therefore
,
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children
rarely participate in this process.
However
, other
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people
believe that kids should
be involved
in household tasks when they are capable of. From my point of view, I
strongly
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agree
with this statement due to the following reasons.

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begin
with,
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doing
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housework
establishes close-knit relationship with family members. There is an
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old
saying that: “Action speaks louder than words”. It means that
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your
saying “
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love
” to your
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parents
daily is not as meaningful as your work to
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help
your
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parents”
. It is certain that
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parents
are always exhausted after a long working,
therefore
,
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children
should
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help
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parents
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so
they have more time to relax.
For example
, youngster
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need to do domestic chores such as sweeping the
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house
or washing dishes can
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makes
their
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parents
avoid having an argument as
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parents
derive too much pressure and tiredness from their work.

More
importantly
,
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children
can derive much essential social
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skills
from
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doing
household chores.
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Children
raise awareness that they have responsibilities to do those things and enhance
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skills
like time management and independence. They
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have to
arrange it
scientifically
to balance the time between learning and
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doing
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housework
.
For instance
, when
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children
became an adult, they could
solely
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make
breakfast and run their family.
Additionally
,
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doing
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housework
is beneficial to their future. Everyone
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has to
grow up and cannot depend on
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parents
forever.
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,
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children
need to
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get
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used
to those activities that they may face in the future in order to take favorable care of themselves.
As a result
, they will find it easier to
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live
independently
when they are mature.

In conclusion
,
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doing
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housework
exist
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many
benefits that
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meet
a need in the future.
Therefore
, it is imperative that
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parents
should encourage
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children
to do domestic work as
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soon
as possible
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just
for the sake of themselves.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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