< span style=" font-size: 19. 36px; " > Unfortunately, in todays society, many people believe that how much you earn tells how successful you are. How do people tell? They look at the clothes you wear, the cars you drive, and more. But I believe money is only one way of being successful. There are many other ways to achieve success.
One way you can be success is by helping other people. Like Malala Yousafzai. As a younger girl in Pakistan, she was shot in the face for defying authority and going to school. After her recovery, she went on to fight for the rights of other girls to go to school and became a humanitarian. I think she is very successful.
Another way you can be successful is by changing your community. My friend’s father is a veteran and so wanted to help other veterans. He was very active in his community and did a lot of things to help make life better for other veterans. By his actions he encouraged other people to also help veterans, and people began to care more about taking care of veterans as a result.
A third way to be successful without money is to earn university degree. For example, I was first person in my family to earn a degree in the United States. My parents moved here when I was very small hoping to offer me and my brother a better life. They sacrificed much things in order to give us opportunity. I really appreciate all the things they did to make it possible for us to go to university.
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; Unfortunately, in
todays
society,
many
people
believe that how much you
earn
tells
how
successful
you are. How do
people
tell
? They look at the clothes you wear, the cars you drive, and more.
But
I believe money is
only
one way of being
successful
. There are
many
other
ways to achieve success.
One way you can be success is by helping
other
people
. Like Malala Yousafzai. As a younger girl in Pakistan, she
was shot
in the face for defying authority and going to school. After her recovery, she went on to fight for the rights of
other
girls to go to school and became a humanitarian. I
think
she is
very
successful.
Another way you can be
successful
is by changing your community. My friend’s father is a
veteran
and
so
wanted to
help
other
veterans
. He was
very
active in his community and did
a lot of
things to
help
make
life better for
other
veterans
. By his actions he encouraged
other
people
to
also
help
veterans
, and
people
began to care more about taking care of
veterans
as a result
.
A third way to be
successful
without money is to
earn
university degree.
For example
, I was
first
person in my family to
earn
a degree in the United States. My parents
moved
here when I was
very
small
hoping to offer me and my brother a better life. They sacrificed
much
things in order to give us opportunity. I
really
appreciate all the things they did to
make
it possible for us to go to university.
As you can
see
, earning
a lot of
money is not the
only
way to
earn
success.
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