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Do you agree or disagree with the statement? People will spend less time cooking and preparing food in twenty years. v.20

People will spend less time cooking and preparing food in twenty years. v. 20
As time goes on, the food habits of people change like many other of their habits. These days, there are many controversies among families about the way of preparing food; I mean cooking food at home as fast as possible or meticulously and by spending enough time on it, ordering food from restaurants and so on. Even though there are many people who insist on keeping the traditional way of preparing and cooking way, at home by organic materials; but there are some else who think people must go toward new way ones all of which are more convenient. I, personally, subscribe to this idea that the people must quit such a traditional way and I think this change will be happened in twenty years. By keeping the changing of life and converting of it to hectic life in mind, the people will not have enough time to spend a lot of time on preparing foods. It is not to mention that the human beings' point of view is boosting, so accordingly they will know more about the value of time and use it more properly. Thriving of technology gives hand to people in order to make their tasks easier in comparison to the past. In first place, humans' lives is spectacularly changing by which each day of their lives is more hectic than their previous days. The reasons of such a change are the tough financial condition of new life, increasing of cost of living, enhancing of peoples demand and so forth all of which make people to work more and more. They spend most of their time in their work places, and the rest of time must be used for a lot of others task like practicing with their children to prepare them for their schools tasks, doing laundry, studying, named but a few. They cannot find time to spend on the cooking and preparing food. For example, I used to hold a calm life, and I didn’t need to work a lot, so accordingly I had a lot of time to do my routines and preparing and cooking food was one of them. But the life changing; the transport cost is increasing, the cost of teaching student is increasing, and having accommodation is going toward more required money and so on. All of these make me work these days more. I have recently gotten a second job in a library to afford my expenses, and I have not enough time to cook food every day. We go restaurants some meals or order food from them. I am sure in future years we totally spend the least time on preparing food because such a change in life will not stop. In fact, in future years, we will work more than now, and we cannot find preparing food time. Secondly, in modern days, the people' s perspective is changing. They are turning from time-waste activities towards time-savings ones. In additional, the thriving of technology provides them opportunity to choose modern machinery life. The time which is spent on preparing and cooking food is one of them. By seeing these, in the near future, a large percentage of people will prefer to do informative works like reading books, watching movies, exercising, going training classes and more instead of preparing and cooking work. They will understand the priceless value of time and use it in the better way. In addition, by prompting and thriving technology, they can find a lot of ways to prepare food, like using advanced cooking appliances by which they will be able to spend less time on preparing food, having a smart robot which can do some routine of people like cooking food and many other ways like these. In summary, by taking all of these into account, I think that the people will spend less time on cooking and preparing food in twenty years. The everyday altering of life from calm and easy to hectic, the people cannot find enough time to spend time as much as these days. Also, it is clear that the knowledge of people are improving, and their perspective is boosting in a way which they will not waste their time at all on vain work like preparing food especially by thriving technology they can find good alternative ways to prepare food.
As
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goes on, the
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food
habits of
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people
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change
like
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many
other of their habits. These days, there are
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many
controversies among families about the
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way
of preparing
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food
; I mean cooking
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food
at home as
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fast
as possible or
meticulously
and by spending
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enough
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time
on it, ordering
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food
from restaurants and
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so
on.
Even though
there are
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many
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people
who insist on keeping the traditional
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way
of preparing and cooking
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way
, at home by organic materials;
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but
there are
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some
else who
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think
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people
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must
go toward new
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way
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ones
all of which are more convenient. I,
personally
, subscribe to this
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idea
that the
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people
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must
quit such a traditional
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way
and I
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think
this
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change
will
be happened
in twenty years. By keeping the
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changing
of
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life
and converting of it to hectic
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life
in mind, the
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people
will not have
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enough
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time
to
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spend
a
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lot
of
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on preparing
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foods
. It is not to mention that the human
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beings&
#039; point of view is boosting,
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accordingly
they will know more about the value of
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time
and
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use
it more
properly
.
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of
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technology
gives hand to
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people
in order to
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make
their tasks easier
in comparison
to the past.

In
first
place,
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humans&
#039;
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lives
is
spectacularly
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changing
by which each day of their
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lives
is more hectic than their previous days. The reasons of such a
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change
are the tough financial condition of new
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life
, increasing of cost of living, enhancing of
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peoples
demand and
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so
forth all of which
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make
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people
to
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work
more and more. They
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spend
most of their
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time
in their
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work
places, and the rest of
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time
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must
be
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used
for a
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lot
of others task like practicing with their children to prepare them for their schools tasks, doing laundry, studying, named
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but
a few. They cannot
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find
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time
to
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spend
on the cooking and preparing
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food
.
For example
, I
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used
to hold a calm
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life
, and I didn’t need to
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work
a
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lot
,
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so
accordingly
I had a
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lot
of
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time
to do my routines and preparing and cooking
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food
was one of them.
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But
the
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life
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changing
; the transport cost is increasing, the cost of teaching student is increasing, and having accommodation is going toward more required money and
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so
on. All of these
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make
me
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work
these days more. I have recently gotten a second job in a library to afford my expenses, and I have not
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enough
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time
to cook
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food
every day. We go restaurants
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some
meals or order
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food
from them. I am sure in future years we
totally
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spend
the least
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time
on preparing
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food
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because
such a
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change
in
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life
will not
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stop
. In fact, in future years, we will
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work
more than
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now
, and we cannot
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find
preparing
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food
time.

Secondly
, in modern days, the
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people&
#039; s perspective is
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changing
. They are turning from time-waste activities towards time-savings
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ones
. In additional, the
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thriving
of
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technology
provides them opportunity to choose modern machinery
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life
. The
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time
which
is spent
on preparing and cooking
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food
is one of them. By seeing these, in the near future, a large percentage of
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people
will prefer to do informative works like reading books, watching movies, exercising, going training classes and more
instead
of preparing and cooking
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work
. They will understand the priceless value of
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time
and
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use
it in the better
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way
.
In addition
, by prompting and
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thriving
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technology
, they can
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find
a
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lot
of
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ways
to prepare
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food
, like using advanced cooking appliances by which they will be able to
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spend
less
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time
on preparing
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food
, having a smart robot which can do
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some
routine of
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people
like cooking
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food
and
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many
other
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ways
like these.

In summary, by taking all of these into account, I
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think
that the
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people
will
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spend
less
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time
on cooking and preparing
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food
in twenty years. The everyday altering of
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life
from calm and easy to hectic, the
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people
cannot
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find
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enough
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time
to
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spend
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time
as much as these days.
Also
, it is
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clear
that the knowledge of
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people
are improving, and their perspective is boosting in a
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way
which they will not waste their
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time
at all on vain
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work
like preparing
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food
especially
by
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thriving
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technology
they can
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find
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good
alternative
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ways
to prepare
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food
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
114Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay People will spend less time cooking and preparing food in twenty years. v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
720 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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