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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People will spend less time cooking and preparing food in twenty years. v.768

People will spend less time cooking and preparing food in twenty years. v. 768
As some people may hold the view that in the next twenty years the food preparation will take the same duration as todays; however, some others may hold an opposite viewpoint, and believe that in the future people will allocate the few hours for cooking. I personally agree with the second belief. In the following statements I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective. The first exquisite reason which advocates my idea is that the hectic lifestyle in the future will restrict the people' s schedule. It is lucidly obvious that there will be a great enhancement in the life' s tempo. Besides, the people will be busier because they possess the heavy and tough schedules. Based upon these tempo and hectic program, it will be arduous to spend some hours for cooking. This limitation will lead the individuals to spend few spans for cooking. Since there is a list of personal tasks which have the priority toward the cooking and dining. Consequently, they will prefer to devote that less duration to do their individual stuffs in place of the cooking. The second example is the proliferation of fast food restaurants in the cities. Nowadays there are bulks of restaurants in the cities where get ready the various types of foods in a short duration. These facilities ease the people' s life. The noteworthy intelligible research conducted in my country illustrates more than sixty nine percent of the family in Tehran, where is big with high tempo lifestyle, are inclined to use the fast food restaurants. Since they are so convenient and fast, moreover adapt with their tough plans. There is no any doubt that this proliferation will continue in the future and people will have a great list of choices. This list will encourage the society to din in the restaurant instead of the home. The last reason which confirms the accuracy of my viewpoint is that the equipped kitchens will take few hours for cooking. There is a massive enhancement in the technology. This enhancement leads to have the huge different machines which facilitate the life. These promoted machines have been used in the kitchen too. Thus, an individual has this opportunity to cook a dish with this equipment so quickly. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is the microwave usages in the kitchen. By microwave it is possible to prepare the different kinds of dishes so fast. As result, if a person will want to cook, by this enhancement in the technology they will spend a shorter duration in the cooking. To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead to the conclusion that in the future people will spend few times for cooking, because they will have the tough program, a big list of accessible restaurants, and equipped kitchen.
As
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people
may hold the view that in the
next
twenty years the
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food
preparation will take the same
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duration
as
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todays
;
however
,
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some
others may hold an opposite viewpoint, and believe that in the
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future
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people
will allocate the few hours for cooking. I
personally
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agree
with the second belief. In the following statements I will delve into the most outstanding
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reasons
which persuade me to put forward this perspective.

The
first
exquisite
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reason
which advocates my
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idea
is that the hectic lifestyle in the
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future
will restrict the
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people&
#039; s schedule. It is
lucidly
obvious that there will be a great
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enhancement
in the
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life&
#039; s tempo.
Besides
, the
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people
will be busier
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because
they possess the heavy and tough schedules. Based upon
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these tempo
and hectic program, it will be arduous to
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spend
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some
hours for cooking. This limitation will lead the individuals to
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spend
few spans for cooking. Since there is a
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list
of personal tasks which have the priority toward the cooking and dining.
Consequently
, they will prefer to devote that less
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duration
to do their individual stuffs in place of the cooking.

The second example is the proliferation of
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fast
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food
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restaurants
in the cities. Nowadays there are bulks of
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restaurants
in the cities where
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get
ready the various types of
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foods
in a short
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duration
. These facilities
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ease
the
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people&
#039; s life. The noteworthy intelligible research conducted in my country illustrates more than
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sixty nine
percent of the family in Tehran, where is
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big
with high tempo lifestyle,
are inclined
to
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use
the
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fast
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food
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restaurants
. Since they are
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so
convenient and
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fast
,
moreover
adapt with their tough plans. There is
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no
any doubt that this proliferation will continue in the
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future
and
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people
will have a great
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list
of choices. This
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list
will encourage the society to din in the
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restaurant
instead
of the home.

The last
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reason
which confirms the accuracy of my viewpoint is that the equipped
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kitchens
will take few hours for cooking. There is a massive
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enhancement
in the technology. This
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enhancement
leads to have the huge
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different
machines which facilitate the life. These promoted machines have been
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used
in the
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kitchen
too.
Thus
, an individual has this opportunity to cook a dish with this equipment
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so
quickly
. A vivid example can be
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given
to shed light on the subject is the microwave usages in the
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kitchen
. By
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microwave it
is possible to prepare the
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different
kinds of dishes
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so
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fast
. As result, if a person will want to cook, by this
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enhancement
in the technology they will
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spend
a shorter
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duration
in the cooking.

To wrap it up, all aforementioned
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reasons
and examples lead to the conclusion that in the
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future
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people
will
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spend
few times for cooking,
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because
they will have the tough program, a
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big
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list
of accessible
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restaurants
, and equipped
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kitchen
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay People will spend less time cooking and preparing food in twenty years. v. 768

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
478 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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