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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed. v.607

In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed. v. 607
In today' s hectic city of life, in which life has trials and tribulations vast majorities of people look for a better life without obstacles and barriers. Indeed, there are various points of view regarding modern life and human beings bend over backward to be successful in their personal lives. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed bring us to the moot question as to whether if people do not comply with others' opinions, they will not be able to succeed. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that human beings have to participate in different groups and take various criticisms into consideration if they want to become successful. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework. To commence with, life difficulties definitely come in different forms and shapes, so, they can be sweet or painful as well. Among these problems, people make their efforts and try hard so as to lead a successful life. Generally phrased, become familiar with the various point of view in the different team, not only can help people consider a wide variety of ideas but also it can help to make the best and a sound decision. As a palpable example, based on a survey conducted by the prominent university in my hometown, a plethora of people who preferred to hear different criticisms in a group, were more likely to make a progress day in day out because criticisms made them not to be gullible toward any fact they received. So, they have become successful after considering various perspectives. To elucidate more on this issue, being criticized provide fertile ground for people to view life differently and broaden their horizon. Therefore, it helps them to think thoroughly and deeply toward any issue and not to do something wrong. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance is that other criticism in a group will provide an opportunity for people to become familiar with other people' s view with diverse attitudes and passions. If we take a minute to ponder over it, ideas, different views, criticism and so forth, are the fundamental elements of being a successful person. Arguably, if people want to succeed, it is necessarily needed to take criticism into account. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that not only will criticism patronize individuals to gain a conspicuous success but also it will support people to enhance their social activities. However, every coin has two sides. There is no guarantee of success if people take criticism into consideration. In fact, people ideas and opinions might not be logical and wise enough to help people succeed. For instance, human beings should try to rely on their own knowledge and experience in order to make an impressive progress and guarantee their success. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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today&
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life
, in which
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life
has trials and tribulations vast majorities of
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people
look for a better
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life
without obstacles and barriers.
Indeed
, there are
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various
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points
of
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view
regarding modern
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life
and human beings bend over backward to be
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successful
in their personal
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lives
.
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Various
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points
of
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view
which are germane to the matter
being discussed
bring us to the moot question
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as to whether
if
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people
do not comply with
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others&
#039; opinions, they will not be able to succeed.
However
, the popular sentiment to which I
vehemently
cling is that human beings
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have to
participate in
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different
groups and take
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various
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criticisms
into consideration if they want to
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become
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successful
. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.

To commence with,
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life
difficulties definitely
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come
in
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different
forms and shapes,
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so
, they can be sweet or painful
as well
. Among these problems,
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people
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make
their efforts and try
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hard
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so as to
lead a
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successful
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life
.
Generally
phrased,
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become
familiar with the
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various
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point
of
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view
in the
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different
team, not
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only
can
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help
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people
consider a wide variety of
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ideas
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but
also
it can
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help
to
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make
the best and a sound decision. As a palpable example, based on a survey conducted by the prominent university in my hometown, a plethora of
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people
who preferred to hear
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different
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criticisms
in a group, were more likely to
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make
a progress day in day out
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because
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criticisms
made them not to be gullible toward any fact they received.
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So
, they have
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become
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successful
after considering
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various
perspectives. To elucidate more on this issue,
being criticized
provide fertile ground for
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people
to
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view
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life
differently
and broaden their horizon.
Therefore
, it
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helps
them to
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think
thoroughly
and
deeply
toward any issue and not to do something
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wrong
.

Another
equally
salient
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point
in corroborating my stance is that other
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criticism
in a group will provide an opportunity for
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people
to
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become
familiar with other
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people&
#039; s
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view
with diverse attitudes and passions. If we take a minute to ponder over it,
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ideas
,
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different
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views
,
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criticism
and
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so
forth, are the fundamental elements of being a
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successful
person.
Arguably
, if
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people
want to succeed, it is
necessarily
needed to take
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criticism
into account. It can
be deduced
from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that not
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only
will
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criticism
patronize individuals to gain a conspicuous success
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but
also
it will support
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people
to enhance their social activities.
However
, every coin has two sides. There is no guarantee of success if
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people
take
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criticism
into consideration. In fact,
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people
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ideas
and opinions might not be logical and wise
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enough
to
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help
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people
succeed.
For instance
, human beings should try to rely on their
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own
knowledge and experience in order to
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make
an impressive progress and guarantee their success.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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IELTS essay In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed. v. 607

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
519 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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