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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One can learn a lot about a person from the types of friends this person has. v.605

One can learn a lot about a person from the types of friends this person has. v. 605
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that people have different characteristics and hallmarks and they bend over backward so as to learn and gain enough information about each other by spending time, social media, friends and so forth. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether people can know and learn a lot about each other through their different types of friends. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that although friends might help us get information about others, people have to spend some time with people to learn about them thoroughly and deeply. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework. To commence with, friends play an important role in our lives and they are the inseparable part of our day to day life because we use to spend our precious time with our close friends. Generally phrased, if we want to learn about a person, it is better to spend some time with that person owing to the fact that human beings have various features and traits. As a palpable example, my brother is studying at a university abroad and he is a diligent and shrewd student with a hard-working attitude. But most of his friends are not knowledgeable and have less level of complication when it comes to education and career. So, with these features, hardly can we learn a lot about my brother because his character is totally different in spite of having different types of friends. To elucidate more on this issue, if we spend some time with people not only can we learn about them extensively but also we can strengthen our circle of friendships. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance is that learn about people by their friends might mislead people and get then wrong information about people' s habits. If we take a minute to ponder over it, people always represent different traits and habits, so, hardly can individuals learn about a person by a perfunctory glance at his/her features. Indeed, it is necessarily needed to learn about people' s true characters and analyze them meticulously. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that people' s friends might not provide an opportunity for us to learn about them truly and correctly. So, we can rely on other means like social media owing to the fact that people introduce themselves completely. However, every coin has two sides. In most cases, people spend most of their time with their friends, so, it provides fertile ground for us to learn about a person by his/her friends. For example, when a person spends his total time with unscrupulous people, we can reach the conclusion that the person could not be a reliable human to spend time with and count on him. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
By and large, it
is established
beyond doubt that
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people
have
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different
characteristics and
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hallmarks and
they bend over backward
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so as to
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learn
and gain
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enough
information about each
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other
by spending
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time
, social media,
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friends
and
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so
forth. Various points of view which are germane to the matter
being discussed
brings us to the moot question
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as to whether
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people
can know and
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learn
a lot about each
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other
through their
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different
types of
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friends
.
However
, the popular sentiment to which I
vehemently
cling is that although
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friends
might
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help
us
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get
information about others,
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people
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have to
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spend
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some
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time
with
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people
to
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learn
about them
thoroughly
and
deeply
. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.

To commence with,
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friends
play an
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important
role in our
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lives and
they are the inseparable part of our
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day to day
life
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because
we
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use to
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spend
our precious
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time
with our close
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friends
.
Generally
phrased, if we want to
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learn
about a
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person
, it is better to
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spend
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some
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time
with that
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person
owing to the fact that human beings have various features and traits. As a palpable example, my brother is studying at a university
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abroad and
he is a diligent and shrewd student with a
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hard
-working attitude.
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But
most of his
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friends
are not knowledgeable and have less level of complication when it
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comes
to education and career.
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So
, with these features, hardly can we
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learn
a lot about my brother
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because
his character is
totally
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different
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in spite of
having
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different
types of
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friends
. To elucidate more on this issue, if we
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spend
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some
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time
with
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people
not
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only
can we
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learn
about them
extensively
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but
also
we can strengthen our circle of friendships.

Another
equally
salient point in corroborating my stance is that
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learn
about
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people
by their
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friends
might mislead
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people
and
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get
then
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wrong
information about
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people&
#039; s habits. If we take a minute to ponder over it,
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people
always represent
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different
traits and habits,
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so
, hardly can individuals
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learn
about a
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person
by a perfunctory glance at his/her features.
Indeed
, it is
necessarily
needed to
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learn
about
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people&
#039; s true characters and analyze them
meticulously
. It can
be deduced
from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that
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people&
#039; s
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friends
might not provide an opportunity for us to
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learn
about them
truly
and
correctly
.
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So
, we can rely on
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other
means like social media owing to the fact that
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people
introduce themselves completely.

However
, every coin has two sides.
In most cases
,
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people
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spend
most of their
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time
with their
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friends
,
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so
, it provides fertile ground for us to
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learn
about a
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person
by his/her
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friends
.
For example
, when a
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person
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spends
his total
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time
with unscrupulous
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people
, we can reach the conclusion that the
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person
could not be a reliable human to
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spend
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time
with and count on him.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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IELTS essay One can learn a lot about a person from the types of friends this person has. v. 605

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
528 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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