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Do you agree or disagree? One can learn a lot about a person from the types of friends this person has. v.51

One can learn a lot about a person from the types of friends this person has. v. 51
Nowadays, studying abroad is not some things that new to many students and parents as many students are going to many countries to continue their educations. Therefore, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. In my perspective, I strongly think that the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages. In many families nowadays, if their parents as well as the children have enough conditions to study abroad, they would definitely do so because the children can be more open-minded and had a better future. Normally, in Vietnam, parents think that studying in the country has already developed is better than the country that just developing, such as The United State of America, Singapore, Canada, Australia and so on. Since students can study overseas, they can have more pros than cons as they can absorb new things which are more modern than their country. They also can learn more languages easily than just their mother tongue and can be more socialise. They can have more international friends than just their country friends. As being one of the students that has been studying abroad, I have tried so many new things that in Vietnam doesn't have and I could make many new friends that so friendly, all from different countries, such as China, Indonesia, Malaysia and so on. They all really nice to me as well as other friends. However, one of the biggest problems for students who are studying overseas is that homesick. Homesick is really making me as well as others international students feel uncomfortable and just really want to get back home as soon as possible. Sometimes, it is hard to be looked parents throughout the phones because there is a time barrier due to different country, therefore the time of students and parents doesn't meet each other. Sometimes, I just really want to hug my parents, but cannot because I am now so far from home. Nevertheless, thinking for better educations as well as better future so I can calm myself down and promise to my parents that I have to do my best in my studies. In conclusions, studying abroad is the biggest chance to have a better future, which has more advantages than disadvantages. We can think about our future and family to make a motivation to do well in school and in life.
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is not
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things that
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and
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are going to
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countries
to continue their educations.
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students
are deciding to
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move
to another
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country
for their studies. In my perspective, I
strongly
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that the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages.

In
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many
families nowadays, if their
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parents
as
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well
as the children have
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enough
conditions to study
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abroad
, they would definitely do
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because
the children can be more open-minded and had a
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future
.
Normally
, in Vietnam,
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parents
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think
that
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studying
in the
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country
has already developed is
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better
than the
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that
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developing, such as The United State of America, Singapore, Canada, Australia and
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on. Since
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students
can study overseas, they can have more pros than cons as they can absorb
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new
things which are more modern than their
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country
. They
also
can learn more languages
easily
than
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just
their mother tongue and can be more
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socialise
. They can have more international friends than
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just
their
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country
friends. As being one of the
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students
that has been
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studying
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abroad
, I have tried
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so
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things that in Vietnam doesn't have and I could
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make
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many
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friends that
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friendly, all from
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different
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countries
, such as China, Indonesia, Malaysia and
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on. They all
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really
nice to me as
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well
as other friends.

However
, one of the biggest problems for
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students
who are
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studying
overseas is that homesick. Homesick is
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making me as
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as others international
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students
feel uncomfortable and
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really
want to
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soon
as possible.
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, it is
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hard
to
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parents
throughout the phones
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there is a time barrier due to
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different
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country
,
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the time of
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each other.
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, I
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want to hug my
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,
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far from home.
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, thinking for
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educations as
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well
as
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better
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future
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so
I can calm myself down and promise to my
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parents
that I
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have to
do my best in my studies.

In conclusions,
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studying
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abroad
is the biggest chance to have a
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better
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future
, which has more advantages than disadvantages. We can
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think
about our
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future
and family to
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make
a motivation to do
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well
in school and in life.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay One can learn a lot about a person from the types of friends this person has. v. 51

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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