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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v.530

Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v. 530
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that teachers play a consequential role in any given society owing to the fact that they put their efforts so as to help students make a progress day in day out. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether the performance of teachers should be assessed by students or other teachers. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that students are familiar with teachers' style of teaching, hallmarks, trait, and behavior and so forth because they are in a close contact with them. So, students can assess better than anyone else. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework. To commence with, students and teachers are the pillars of every nation because improvement and development of a society largely depend on their performances in the academic setting. Broadly speaking, students spend most of their precious time with their teachers, so, they could evaluate performances of teachers precisely and meticulously. As a tangible example, during school years, students live with their teachers and they are able to become acquainted with the positive and negative feature, teaching style, mood and many other characteristics, which are necessary when it comes to evaluation of teachers. Although teachers might be familiar with each other, they might not be able, to tell the truth, because they are not in a close relationship. To elucidate more on this issue, if we want to witness an impeccable assessment, we have to rely on students opinions. Otherwise, not only can the performances of teachers be spurious but also can prevent teachers from making a conspicuous progress. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance is that teachers have always tried to guide students to continue their study and reach an impressive education in their personal lives. If we take a minute to ponder over it, students can assess their teachers because they are able to distinguish whether their teachers' information and knowledge were useful or not. Indeed, knowledge and experience of teachers play a key role and are two of the most significant hallmarks that any teacher needs to carry. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that these knowledge and experience are only measurable by students because these experiences form their future lives and make known whether they could be successful or not. However, every coin has two sides. In any case, students might not be able to assess their teachers due to the fact that they only evaluate based on grades they receive. For example, a plethora of students is not able to compete and perform well at school because they are not interested in their education. So, they introduce their teachers as the main reason for their defeats. In such cases, students are not mature enough for evaluation. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal viewpoint. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
By and large, it
is established
beyond doubt that
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teachers
play a consequential role in any
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given
society owing to the fact that they put their efforts
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so as to
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help
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students
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make
a progress day in day out. Various points of view which are germane to the matter
being discussed
brings us to the moot question
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as to whether
the
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performance
of
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teachers
should
be assessed
by
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students
or other
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teachers
.
However
, the popular sentiment to which I
vehemently
cling is that
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students
are familiar with
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teachers&
#039; style of teaching, hallmarks, trait, and behavior and
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so
forth
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because
they are in a close contact with them.
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So
,
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students
can assess better than anyone else. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.

To commence with,
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students
and
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teachers
are the pillars of every nation
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because
improvement and development of a society
largely
depend on their
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performances
in the academic setting.
Broadly
speaking,
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students
spend most of their precious time with their
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teachers
,
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so
, they could evaluate
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performances
of
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teachers
precisely
and
meticulously
. As a tangible example, during school years,
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students
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live
with their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
teachers and
they are
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able
to become acquainted with the
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positive
and
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negative
feature, teaching style, mood and
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many
other characteristics, which are necessary when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to evaluation of
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teachers
. Although
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teachers
might be familiar with each other, they might not be
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able
, to
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tell
the truth,
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because
they are not in a close relationship. To elucidate more on this issue, if we want to witness an impeccable assessment, we
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have to
rely on
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students
opinions.
Otherwise
, not
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only
can the
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performances
of
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teachers
be spurious
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but
also
can
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prevent
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teachers
from making
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "conspicuous progress".
a conspicuous progress
.

Another
equally
salient point in corroborating my stance is that
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teachers
have always tried to guide
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students
to continue their study and reach an impressive education in their personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. If we take a minute to ponder over it,
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students
can assess their
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teachers
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because
they are
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able
to distinguish whether their
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teachers&
#039; information and knowledge were useful or not.
Indeed
, knowledge and experience of
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teachers
play a key role and are two of the most significant hallmarks that any
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teacher
needs to carry. It can
be deduced
from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that
Did you mean "this knowledge" or "these knowledges"?
these knowledge
and experience are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
measurable by
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students
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because
these experiences form their future
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lives
and
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make
known whether they could be successful or not.

However
, every coin has two sides. In any case,
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students
might not be
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able
to assess their
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teachers
due to the fact that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
evaluate based on grades they receive.
For example
, a plethora of
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students
is not
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able
to compete and perform well at school
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because
they are not interested in their education.
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So
, they introduce their
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teachers
as the main reason for their defeats. In such cases,
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students
are not mature
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enough
for evaluation.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal viewpoint.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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IELTS essay Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v. 530

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
529 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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