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Some people think that teachers should be evaluated by the performance of their students on standardised tests at the end of the term. Other people maintain that teachers should be judged by their own performance in the classroom, and not by the scores th v.1

Some people think that teachers should be evaluated by the performance of their students on standardised tests at the end of the term. Other people maintain that teachers should be judged by their own performance in the classroom, and not by the scores th v. 1
Job market is dynamic and this is often noticed that more and more people switch their jobs while they are still working. This is because of the better opportunities and increase in salary compared to their previous one. Such kind of trend is not positive for the future. Firstly, when an employee is getting and increased remuneration, many of them leave their old job profile. For example, as per the recent article in The Guardian, change is vital to earn more money since in the current organisation might offer an increment depending on the companies profit which is can not sure. Whereas, if an employee switches their career they can demand 20% - 30% hike on current wages. Secondly, people go for a better prospect such as for the designation. For instance, according to a survey conducted by The UK Government, the majority of employees go for another job, due to lack of opportunity. It is necessary to appreciate people by giving the recognition. Although, due to certain benefits people switch their job, but it can be a drawback on their resume and will be difficult getting jobs in the future. As per the recent interview with Employment Exchange Chairman, an organization prefers people who had worked for long duration in one role rather than someone with lots of different experiences. The fluctuating ratio is only taken into consideration when comes to selecting an employer on higher job roles and responsibility. To conclude, it is essential to change work when it comes with certain benefits, but is advised that such kind changes can be negative in the future.
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noticed that more and more
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switch their
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jobs
while they are
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for the future.

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profile.
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, as per the recent article in The Guardian,
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change
is vital to earn more money since in the
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current
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might offer an increment depending on the
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companies
profit which is
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not sure. Whereas, if an employee switches their career they can demand 20%
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30% hike on
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wages.

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,
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go for a better prospect such as for the designation.
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, according to a survey conducted by The UK
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, the majority of employees go for another
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, due to lack of opportunity. It is necessary to appreciate
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people
by giving the recognition.

Although, due to certain benefits
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switch their
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,
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it can be a drawback on their resume and will be difficult getting
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jobs
in the future. As per the recent interview with Employment Exchange Chairman, an
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organization
prefers
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people
who had worked for long duration in one role
rather
than someone with lots of
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different
experiences. The fluctuating ratio is
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taken into consideration when
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to selecting an employer on higher
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roles and responsibility.

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, it is essential to
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change
work when it
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with certain benefits,
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is advised
that such kind
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changes
can be
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in the future.
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IELTS essay Some people think that teachers should be evaluated by the performance of their students on standardised tests at the end of the term. Other people maintain that teachers should be judged by their own performance in the classroom, and not by the scores th v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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