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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v.107

Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v. 107
History, Science and Technology both subjects are very important. There is an argument between the two groups of people. A few numbers of people claim that History is a very important subject and other community believes that in 21th century, Science and Technology is more significant subject than History. In my opinion, every subject is very important to us. People need to know the history and also need to learn Science and Technology to keep pace with the world. In History, people know about much information. Firstly, they are known about any country’s history, culture, religion and much more information which are already happening in the past. For example, Bangladesh is a democratic country. It has a great history. Bangladesh won the Liberation war of 1971. 26th march is the independence day of Bangladesh. Before the liberation war Bangladesh was a part of Pakistan. That time Bangladesh name was East Pakistan. We know this information in a history and we also know about the culture, religion and many more information about Bangladesh. So, History subject is very important to us to know about the past. On the other hand, now a day’s Science and Technology is more advanced. People are maintaining an international relationship by using technology. Every moment, peoples are creating lots of important things by the method of science and using of technology. To give an instance, most of the people are using Facebook in recent time. Facebook is a modern technology. People can easily communicate with other peoples via Facebook. So, some people claim that science and technology is very important in today’s world. In conclusion, every peoples need for knowledge about all subjects. These both subjects are equally important for every person. I think, history subject help us to know the past and Science and Technology subject help us to know about the recent world. So, every person should have knowledge in both subjects.
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both
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. There is an argument between the two groups of
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people
. A few numbers of
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people
claim that
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is a
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important
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subject
and other community believes that in
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21th
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and
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is more significant
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. In my opinion, every
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the
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to
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keep
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about much
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.
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, they
are known
about any country’s
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history
, culture, religion and much more
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information
which are already happening in the past.
For example
, Bangladesh is a democratic country. It has a great
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history
. Bangladesh won the Liberation war of 1971. 26th march is the
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independence day
of Bangladesh.
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Before
the liberation war Bangladesh was a part of Pakistan. That time Bangladesh name was East Pakistan. We
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this
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information
in a
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history and
we
also
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know
about the culture, religion and
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many
more
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information
about Bangladesh.
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,
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about the past.

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a day’s
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and
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is more advanced.
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People
are maintaining an international relationship by using
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technology
. Every moment,
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peoples
are creating lots of
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important
things by the method of
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and using of
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. To give an instance, most of the
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people
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.
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can
easily
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peoples
via Facebook.
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,
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, every
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. These both
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equally
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for every person. I
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know
the past and
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.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Teachers’ performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers. v. 107

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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