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Many farmers keep animals and raise crops at the same time. While some farmers treat the cultivation of their animals and plants as two separate activities, others integrate the two so that they work together. This is called integrated farming. Integrated v.1

Many farmers keep animals and raise crops at the same time. While some farmers treat the cultivation of their animals and plants as two separate activities, others integrate the two so that they work together. This is called integrated farming. Integrated v. 1
Nowadays, wealthy nations are becoming wealthier and financially down countries are getting poorer. This essay will discuss cause of this development and solution to mitigate this issue. Wealthy nations are spending and working further on its economic sector, which makes them progress more and strengthening its economy. It is a known fact that money produces money by investing it in different sectors. Developed counties do not need money from other countries and are independent in the economic domain and hence can achieve growth without requiring any assistance. Similarly, poor nations are getting financial assistance and loans from rich countries which makes them in debt, and in turn, result in higher taxes on all commodities. These taxes on different commodities bring a burden on the finance of government and public and thus makes them poorer. A recent report by the International Monetary Fund, for instance, reported that countries who takes financial assistance from rich nations are getting financially down by 20% each year. Equal money distribution is a critical way to solve the difference between rich and poor countries. Wealthy nations ought to assist financially the poor countries by giving money to them and not taking it back. This will not affect the economy of developed countries and poor nations will be able to decrease its financial strain, and consequently will come out from financial problems. Research by the Economics Institute of London, for example, concluded a study that, if countries with more wealth gives 10% of their money to the poor nations, they will get rid of financial problems. In conclusion, financially well nations working on strengthening their economy more and poor countries taking financial loans from developed countries are the reasons of rich countries become richer and poor countries become poorer. Even money distribution by rich countries to the poor one’s is the main way to cope with this issue.
Nowadays, wealthy
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nations
are becoming wealthier and
financially
down
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countries
are getting poorer. This essay will discuss cause of this development and solution to mitigate this issue.

Wealthy
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nations
are spending and working
further
on its economic sector, which
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makes
them progress more and strengthening its economy. It is a known fact that
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money
produces
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money
by investing it in
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different
sectors. Developed counties do not need
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money
from other
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countries
and are independent in the economic domain and
hence
can achieve growth without requiring any assistance.
Similarly
,
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poor
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nations
are getting
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financial
assistance and loans from
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rich
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countries
which
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makes
them in debt, and in turn, result in higher taxes on all commodities. These taxes on
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different
commodities bring a burden on the finance of
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government
and public and
thus
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makes
them poorer. A recent report by the International Monetary Fund,
for instance
, reported that
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countries
who
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takes
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financial
assistance from
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rich
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nations
are getting
financially
down by 20% each year.

Equal
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money
distribution is a critical way to solve the difference between
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rich
and
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poor
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countries
. Wealthy
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nations
ought to assist
financially
the
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poor
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countries
by giving
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money
to them and not taking it back. This will not affect the economy of developed
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countries
and
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poor
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nations
will be able to decrease its
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financial
strain, and
consequently
will
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come
out from
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financial
problems. Research by the Economics Institute of London,
for example
, concluded a study that, if
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countries
with more wealth gives 10% of their
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money
to the
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poor
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nations
, they will
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get
rid of
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financial
problems.

In conclusion
,
financially
well
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nations
working on strengthening their economy more and
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poor
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countries
taking
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financial
loans from developed
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countries
are the reasons of
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rich
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countries
become richer and
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poor
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countries
become poorer. Even
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money
distribution by
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rich
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countries
to the
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poor
one’s is the main way to cope with this issue.
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IELTS essay Many farmers keep animals and raise crops at the same time. While some farmers treat the cultivation of their animals and plants as two separate activities, others integrate the two so that they work together. This is called integrated farming. Integrated v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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