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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.450

Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 450
Human are the most remarkable creation on the Earth, due to their high advanced brains. The argument is whether human can learn some skills that have not developed before, such as being a leader, or not. I believe that human is able to become a leader whenever they want because of following reasons. To begin with, the most considerable factor for developing a new skill is learning. In fact, if human gradually learnt an activity, they would become an expert in that activity. For instance, Network Marketing recently is introduced to the world as a career, and it contains ordinary people as members. After a person joined in a Network Marketing' s group, that person must be trained by previous members. In the Next step, that person must invite others to join in his career and produce a group of members. Finally, he would become a leader of his own group, and in order to succeed he must train them. Furthermore, if we want to learn a new skill, we have to directly work on our minds. Consider a baby as an example, even though he could not even sit by himself, he would walk after a couple of years, since he gradually worked with his legs' muscles. Since, brains are part of our bodies, we could work and develop them by practicing. So, people would be able to guide a team while they have worked on their own brains. Last but not the least, we must affect our personality to learning a new skill, and by building a strong self-confidence, we would overcome each aspect of vicissitudes of being a leader. The first source of our confidence is family, especially when we were children. Afterward, friends became the most effective source, which a person can utilize for rebuild his own confidence by choosing more confident friends. Due to that, a person would learn how to act as a leader. Hence, he would easily speak in front of audience, also he would bring about the best ideas regarding a wide variety of phenomenon. To sum up, I am of the conviction that a leader did not need to be born. Indeed, he or she must be build up over time. Due to that, he must learn, practice and work on his personality.
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human
can
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learn
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some
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skills
that have not developed
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before
, such as being a
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leader
, or not. I believe that
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human
is able to become a
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leader
whenever they want
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because
of following reasons.

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begin
with, the most considerable factor for developing a new
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skill
is learning. In fact, if
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human
gradually
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learnt an
activity, they would become an expert in that activity.
For instance
, Network Marketing recently
is introduced
to the world as a career, and it contains ordinary
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people
as members. After a
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person
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joined
in a Network
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Marketing&
#039; s group, that
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person
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must
be trained
by previous members. In the
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step, that
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person
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must
invite others to
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join
in his career and produce a group of members.
Finally
, he would become a
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leader
of his
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own
group, and in order to succeed he
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must
train them.

Furthermore
, if we want to
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learn
a new
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skill
, we
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have to
directly
work on our minds. Consider a baby as an example,
even though
he could not even sit by himself, he would walk after a couple of years, since he
gradually
worked with his
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legs&
#039; muscles. Since, brains are part of our bodies, we could work and develop them by practicing.
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So
,
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would be able to guide a team while they have worked on their
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own
brains.

Last
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not the least, we
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must
affect our personality to learning a new
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skill
, and by building a strong self-confidence, we would overcome each aspect of vicissitudes of being a
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leader
. The
first
source of our confidence is family,
especially
when we were children. Afterward, friends became the most effective source, which a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
can utilize for rebuild his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
confidence by choosing more confident friends. Due to that, a
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person
would
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learn
how to act as a
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leader
.
Hence
, he would
easily
speak in front of audience,
also
he would bring about the best
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ideas
regarding a wide variety of phenomenon.

To sum up, I am of the conviction that a
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leader
did not need to
be born
.
Indeed
, he or she
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must
be build up over time. Due to that, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
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learn
, practice and work on his personality.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 450

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
382 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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