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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that history as a subject at school is not useful and should be replaced with a more practical subject. Why do you think it is important to learn about history? What would be the effect if c v.62

Some people think that history as a subject at school is not useful and should be replaced with a more practical subject. Why do you think it is important to learn about history? What would be the effect if c v. 62
Across the world, there is no dearth of people who consider that teaching history at educational institution is unproductive and is a waste of resources. The people who advocate such ideas are of the opinion that schools and colleges should impart education on such subjects which have more practical use. Nevertheless, my opinion on the subject is that we must teach history to our children. Therefore, we cannot do away with this subject. First of all, history helps us to find our roots and connects us with our past which will be very helpful to young learners to shape their views of the modern world. If history is not taught in our schools and universities, people will not get any opportunity to view the contemporary world with the help of past events. In some cases, not teaching history can actually lead to a situation where students fail to fully comprehend the happenings around them. For example, why a country needs a strong army could possibly be best explained on the basis of historical facts and figures. Therefore, study of historical events is very significant from the viewpoint of understanding modern world. In addition to it, if history subject is replaced with another course, students may be burdened with unnecessary knowledge in another subject. The likely consequences of it could range from lack of interests among students to defective education systems. When students who have not studied history go to work in international forums, they may face several challenges. For example, without learning world history, no one can be expected to be able to work smoothly in the UN. To sum up, modern schools should not think of removing history subject from their curriculum. Any such move is likely to have unintended consequences such as lack of interests among students in their course of study.
Across the
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world
, there is no dearth of
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people
who consider that teaching
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history
at educational institution is unproductive and is a waste of resources. The
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people
who advocate such
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ideas
are of the opinion that schools and colleges should impart education on such
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subjects
which have more practical
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use
.
Nevertheless
, my opinion on the
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subject
is that we
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must
teach
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history
to our children.
Therefore
, we cannot do away with this subject.

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First of all
,
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history
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helps us to find
our roots and connects us with our past which will be
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very
helpful to young learners to shape their views of the modern
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world
. If
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history
is not taught in our schools and universities,
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people
will not
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get
any opportunity to view the contemporary
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world
with the
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help
of past
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events
. In
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some
cases, not teaching
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history
can actually lead to a situation where
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students
fail to
fully
comprehend
Consider using "the surrounding happenings".
the happenings around them
.
For example
, why a country needs a strong army could
possibly
be best
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explained
on the basis of historical facts and figures.
Therefore
, study of historical
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events
is
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very
significant from the viewpoint of understanding modern world.

In addition
to it, if
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history
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subject
is replaced
with another course,
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students
may
be burdened
with unnecessary knowledge in another
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subject
. The likely consequences of it could range from lack of interests among
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students
to defective education systems. When
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students
who have not studied
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history
go to work in international forums, they may face several challenges.
For example
, without learning
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world
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history
, no one can be
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expected
to be able to work
smoothly
in the UN.

To sum up, modern schools should not
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think
of removing
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history
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subject
from their curriculum. Any such
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move
is likely to have unintended consequences such as lack of interests among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in their course of study.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that history as a subject at school is not useful and should be replaced with a more practical subject. Why do you think it is important to learn about history? What would be the effect if c v. 62

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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