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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience. v.449

Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should v. 449
I agree with this statement that parents are the best counselors to give good suggestions while we are struggling to make better decisions. I have completed BSc nursing, after certified as a graduate meanwhile I was suffering from future decisions at the current movement my mother has come and told me that you have two options, firstly, if you go medical coding side based on your paramedical course then you may get little opportunities such as getting job on coding filed like a software engineer. Secondly, you have a wonderful life if you choose to work as a registered nurse in reputed hospitals, then after completion of one or two years of experience you may come to a home and enjoy with your job while having a family life and homely food. At the movement, I decided to choose my career as a staff nurse. Now I am happy with my joyful job. One of my friends, his name is Jagadeesh, he too suffered to make a clarity in his mind at the movement he has gone to his father. He suggested to him that this is the golden step to take before decision and advised also better to do business in current market then automatically you gain your communication skills and increase your growth fastly, then finally he started his own business, it runs well and even though his bank balance also increases, what a fantastic decision. Now he believed that it was successful by his father idea. In my opinion by comparison of my two ideas, then parents are the good advocates. So each child has to make a decision with his /her parents.
I
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agree
with this statement that parents are the best counselors to give
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good
suggestions while we are struggling to
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make
better decisions.

I have completed
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BSc
nursing, after certified as a graduate meanwhile I was suffering from future
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decisions
at the
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current
movement my mother has
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come
and
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told
me that you have two options,
firstly
, if you go medical coding side based on your paramedical course then you may
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get
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little
opportunities such as getting job on coding filed like a software engineer.
Secondly
, you have a wonderful life if you choose to work as a registered nurse in reputed hospitals, then after completion of one or two years of experience you may
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come
to a home and enjoy with your job while having a family life and homely food. At the movement, I decided to choose my career as a staff nurse.
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Now
I am happy with my joyful job.

One of my friends, his name is
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Jagadeesh
, he too suffered to
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make
a clarity in his mind at the movement he has gone to his father. He suggested to him that this is the golden step to take
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before
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decision
and advised
also
better to do business in
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current
market then
automatically
you gain your communication
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skills
and increase your growth
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fastly
, then
finally
he
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started
his
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own
business, it runs well and
even though
his bank balance
also
increases, what a fantastic
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decision
.
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Now
he believed that it was successful by his father
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idea
.

In my opinion by comparison of my two
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ideas
, then parents are the
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good
advocates.
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So
each child
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has to
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make
a
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decision
with his /her parents.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. You should v. 449

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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