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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v.414

In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v. 414
In the contemporary world, there are plenty of sophisticated technology that provides various of information, and will help the vast majority of people to receive most different resources to fulfil their curiosity. However, I personally believe that it is more effective to extend their insight instead of one source. There are several reasons of every person should know many information from more than one side. First and foremost, it enables everyone to get the whole picture, then they will probably clarify all of them, which is the right and accurate news to confirm. Getting only one news from one perspective that is not extremely true, for instance, it will be seriously misleading to suggest the view of its object. Furthermore, it is not only for enriching the insight, but also improving data quality for each individual. By means, the myriad of information will improve the way of people in analysing the kind of its data and understanding it. On the other hand, the experience of the respondents is having a great opportunity to extinguish between the false and true news. This kind of skill is truly needed to assure that the person is truly knowing the right things. Besides, the other skills such as detecting the deception of information will be automatically recognized, if the person prefers to read more different data. Thus, everyone could figure out the wrong media in providing the information in this modern era. By way of conclusion, although, there are sophisticated media that could be trusted, yet every person must be careful in getting it by reading the various data. As I would state that knowing different kind of information will also improve the skill of individual in reading news from other sources.
In the contemporary world, there are
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plenty
of sophisticated technology that provides various of
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information
, and will
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help
the vast majority of
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people
to receive most
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different
resources to fulfil their curiosity.
However
, I
personally
believe that it is more effective to extend their insight
instead
of one source.

There are several reasons of every
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person
should know
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many
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information
from more than one side.
First
and foremost, it enables everyone to
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get
the whole picture, then they will
probably
clarify all of them, which is the right and accurate
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news
to confirm. Getting
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only
one
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news
from one perspective
that is
not
extremely
true,
for instance
, it will be
seriously
misleading to suggest the view of its object.
Furthermore
, it is not
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only
for enriching the insight,
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but
also
improving
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data
quality for each individual. By means, the myriad of
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information
will
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improve
the way of
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people
in
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analysing
the kind of its
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data
and understanding it.

On the other hand
, the experience of the respondents is having a great opportunity to extinguish between the false and true
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news
. This kind of
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skill
is
truly
needed to assure that the
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person
is
truly
knowing the right things.
Besides
, the other
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skills
such as detecting the deception of
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information
will be
automatically
recognized, if the
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person
prefers to read more
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different
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data
.
Thus
, everyone could figure out the
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wrong
media in providing the
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information
in this modern era.

By way of conclusion, although, there
are sophisticated
media that could
be trusted
,
yet
every
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person
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must
be careful in getting it by reading the various
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data
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I would state that knowing
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different
kind of
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information
will
also
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improve
the
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skill
of individual in reading
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news
from other sources.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v. 414

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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