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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising influences people's behavior in a negative way. use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v.352

Advertising influences people's behavior in a negative way. use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 352
As a result of the tourism improvement, English is becoming the most spoken languages in the world and leading to be a global language. This essay will highlight both the benefits and drawbacks of having a one globally spoken language. To begin with the positive, a crucial advantage of having a single language around the globe is that travelling to foreign places will be more cost-efficient. This is because, the travellers are no longer required to get assistance from translators to have a smooth journey. In contrast, the additional costs may need to factor in travel expenses if the language barrier exists. Besides being cost-friendly, speaking a single language encourages in technology improvement. As the resources such as books and other useful resources are channeled in a singular form, it helps to mitigate the waiting time for translation. As a result, every learner will receive an equal opportunity to learn swiftly, which leads to a gradual improvement in technology. Nevertheless, having a single language as a communication tool does present the problems as when a language extinct, the culture of that society can be disappeared. Considering the fact that people learn and transmit culture through the word, it is no wonder that language plays a vital role in our society. Another significant disadvantage of this communication tool is the air pollution issue. The reason for this is when travelling becomes easier with no language difficulties; people tend to travel often with the use of high-speed vehicles, aeroplane as an example. Thus, it can create adverse effects on the environment, such as air pollution. In conclusion, although having a single language is beneficial in terms of cost and technology advancement, it is important to consider that they can also harm the culture and are arguably not as environment-friendly as having multi-languages.
As a result
of the tourism improvement, English is becoming the most spoken
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languages
in the world and leading to be a global
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language
. This essay will highlight both the benefits and drawbacks of
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having
a one globally spoken language.

To
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begin
with the
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positive
, a crucial advantage of
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having
a
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single
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language
around the globe is that travelling to foreign places will be more cost-efficient. This is
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because
, the
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travellers
are no longer required to
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get
assistance from translators to have a smooth journey.
In contrast
, the additional costs may need to factor in travel expenses if the
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language
barrier exists.
Besides
being cost
-friendly, speaking a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
single
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language
encourages in technology improvement. As the resources such as books and other useful resources
are channeled
in a singular form, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to mitigate the waiting time for translation.
As a result
, every learner will receive an equal opportunity to learn
swiftly
, which leads to a gradual improvement in technology.

Nevertheless
,
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having
a
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single
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language
as a communication tool does present the problems as when a
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language
extinct, the culture of that society can
be disappeared
. Considering the fact that
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people
learn and transmit culture through the word, it is no wonder that
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language
plays a vital role in our society. Another significant disadvantage of this communication tool is the air pollution issue.
The reason for this is
when travelling becomes easier with no
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language
difficulties;
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people
tend to travel
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often
with the
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use
of high-speed vehicles,
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aeroplane
as an example.
Thus
, it can create adverse effects on the environment, such as air pollution.

In conclusion
, although
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having
a
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single
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language
is beneficial in terms of cost and technology advancement, it is
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important
to consider that they can
also
harm the culture and are
arguably
not as environment-friendly as
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having
multi-languages.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Advertising influences people's behavior in a negative way. use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion v. 352

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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