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The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010 v.1

The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010 v. 1
Nowadays, public libraries have less convenient than computer technology so people are borrowing books from libraries which are lower in the past, but I strongly agree that maintaining public libraries is not beneficial ways for people or government. First of all, most people have less time to borrow books at the library because computer technology has developed to easily for people who are busy to find a research from books. As a result, the number of visitors had lowest and there is some high cost of expenses such as electricity, staff members’ salary or the rent of the space. In addition, Schools or Universities have changed methods to teach by using computers, tablets or e-books because teachers can send information from a website on the internet, sending to students before or after the classroom so some can download and read any content in their smart phone that they want. Finally, some books or magazines might be boring and not engaging for people due to the internet have more interesting and easier to find such as BBC online or Bangkok Post online. However, public libraries have some advantages for children or adults, especially some families have not computer access with internet that is available for students because the computer is very expensive and they may not be able to afford at home. Moreover, the books and magazines in the library are guaranteed by written so it can reduce some misinformation from research. To sum up, computer technology has more usefulness for this modern era, so it is comfortable for people to save time, flexibility or abundant options to read.
Nowadays, public libraries have less convenient than computer technology
so
people
are borrowing
books
from libraries which are lower in the past,
but
I
strongly
agree
that maintaining public libraries is not beneficial ways for
people
or
government
.

First of all
, most
people
have less time to borrow
books
at the library
because
computer technology has developed to
easily
for
people
who are busy to find
a research
from
books
.
As a result
, the number of visitors had lowest and there is
some
high cost of expenses such as electricity, staff members’ salary or the rent of the space.
In addition
, Schools or Universities have
changed
methods to teach by using computers, tablets or e-books
because
teachers can
send
information from a website on the internet, sending to students
before
or after the classroom
so
some
can download and read any content in their smart phone that they want.
Finally
,
some
books
or magazines might be boring and not engaging for
people
due to the internet have more interesting and easier to find such as BBC online or Bangkok Post online.

However
, public libraries have
some
advantages for children or adults,
especially
some
families have not computer access with internet
that is
available for students
because
the computer is
very
expensive and
they may not be able to afford at home.
Moreover
, the
books
and magazines in the library
are guaranteed
by written
so
it can
reduce
some
misinformation from research.

To sum up, computer technology has more usefulness for this modern era,
so
it is comfortable for
people
to save time, flexibility or abundant options to read.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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