Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that the only purpose of films is entertaining. Others say that films should have educational value. Discuss both view and give your opinion v.1

Some people believe that the only purpose of films is entertaining. Others say that films should have educational value. 1
These days, schools are improving to give the lessons they are gaining knowledge in the school. What is the most effective method for dealing with managing money in class? Some people believe that trouble is facing for cash in the institution. In this essay, I will support my opinion with examples. Firstly, kids is giving lessons on the stage, so you have to increase confidence and stage fear. There are taking off full experience in various sectors. For example, the university has the following two facing lectures on the stage. There is a lot of questions asking in front of members about their topic. KLU is more people are studying and giving a good around India for cash also. Secondly, money is managing to difficult for school. Likewise, they do not have the best behaviour of following the trends and a lack of communication with others. For instance, Government schools are decreasing in my state, but toddlers are playing games not able given lessons. Infants safety your health, but there are not bothering for money. Furthermore, the scientist is rising a better quality of the livelihood from the school onwards. Other countries are following behind reasons to get more values. In conclusion, although it is a common belief that toddlers should be specific lessons on how to organize funds in an educational institution. I believe the increase in confidence in the period. I think that bad behaviour and business in the public sector. Kids are improving the knowledge, so cash to gain in the academy.
These days,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
are improving to give the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
they are gaining knowledge in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. What is the most effective method for dealing with managing money in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
?
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that trouble is facing for cash in the institution. In this essay, I will support my opinion with examples.

Firstly
, kids is giving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
on the stage,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
increase confidence and stage fear. There are taking off full experience in various sectors.
For example
, the university has the following two facing lectures on the stage. There is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
questions asking in front of members about their topic.
Possible spelling mistake found.
KLU
is more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are studying and giving a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
around India for cash
also
.

Secondly
, money is managing to difficult for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Likewise
, they do not have the best
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
of following the trends and a lack of communication with others.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
are decreasing in my state,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
toddlers are playing games not able
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
. Infants safety your health,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
there are not bothering for money.
Furthermore
, the scientist is rising a better quality of the livelihood from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
onwards. Other countries are following behind reasons to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
more values.

In conclusion
, although it is a common belief that toddlers should be specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
on how to organize funds in an educational institution. I believe the increase in confidence in the period. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
and business in the public sector. Kids are improving the knowledge,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
cash to gain in the academy.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the only purpose of films is entertaining. Others say that films should have educational value. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts