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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.309

Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 309
Nowadays the main recruitment option of employees is by conducting interviews. However, in my opinion, I believe there are other more effective ways to offer jobs. This essay will illustrate the facts about those methods while discussing the drawbacks of the interviews. To begin with, both the candidate and the employer get certain disadvantages of this common way of hiring people. Most organizations look for best suitable persons for their staff. Including the knowledge of the relevant field, they also search for personal qualities, which cannot be identified through a short interview. On the other hand, some people do not pose good first impression in an interview because of the nervousness they are in that particular situation. Hence, they tend to get bad marks in this evaluating method. Therefore, it is difficult to capture the best suited candidate form this option. As a result, now employers are trying different processes to identify viable people to for them. One of this is by giving new employees a probation period. During this time the new person has to work with the staff of that certain organization, which allows the company to learn about him or her regarding the attitudes and capable of working. Another method is by conducting a series of amplitude test, these tests consist of psychic evaluation of job role related papers. The final result of these papers represents the personal character and the knowledge of a person. Hence, Evidently, there are numerous methods available to evaluate the employees than the conventional way. To conclude, due to numerous drawbacks the traditional way of finding suitable staff is known to be ineffective. Therefore, some companies today, exploring new methods such as offering a temporary working period.
Nowadays the main recruitment option of employees is by conducting interviews.
However
, in my opinion, I believe there are other more effective ways to offer jobs. This essay will illustrate the facts about those
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methods
while discussing the drawbacks of the interviews.

To
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with, both the candidate and the employer
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get
certain disadvantages of this common way of hiring
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people
. Most organizations look for best suitable persons for their staff. Including the knowledge of the relevant field, they
also
search for personal qualities, which cannot
be identified
through a short interview.
On the other hand
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people
do not pose
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good
first
impression in an interview
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because
of the nervousness they are in that particular situation.
Hence
, they tend to
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get
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bad
marks in this evaluating
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method
.
Therefore
, it is difficult to capture the best suited candidate form this option.

As a result
,
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now
employers are trying
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different
processes to identify viable
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people
to for them. One of this is by giving new employees a probation period. During this time the new person
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has to
work with the staff of that certain organization, which
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allows
the
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company
to learn about him or her regarding the attitudes and capable of working. Another
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method
is by conducting a series of amplitude
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test
, these
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tests
consist of psychic evaluation of job role related papers. The final result of these papers represents the personal character and the knowledge of a person.
Hence
,
Evidently
, there are numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
available to evaluate the employees than the conventional way.

To conclude
, due to numerous drawbacks the traditional way of finding suitable staff
is known
to be ineffective.
Therefore
,
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some
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companies
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today
, exploring new
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methods
such as offering a temporary working period.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 309

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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