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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life of your generation is easier than that of your grandparents. Please include specific details and examples in your explanation. v.296

Life of your generation is easier than that of your grandparents. Please include specific details and examples in your explanation. v. 296
In today`s world, the standard of living of most of the individuals is rising day by day, due to urbanization. More people are working nowadays, and they get a huge sum of money. Moreover, they use their salaries to purchase the materialistic things. I think it has both positive as well as detrimental effects on the public. Like, if someone is using their hard-earned money on something that they really need, then it is a good effort, but if they are purchasing unnecessary things, then it is a major issue. Undoubtedly, everyone dreamt of buying the things they love in their lives. However, because of lack of monies, they are unable to get that thing. But, when they start earning, they utilise their salaries on their dreamt items. For instance, a person who was not able to buy a car in his college days, get his dream car, when he begins his job. This all leads to sense of contentment and happiness among the persons who fulfil their desired dreams. On the other hand, some people utilise their wages to raise their status in the society by spending them on luxury items, which they can be used to mark their status and thus for the show off purposes. For example, many times, persons get into debt, due to over-spending on the branded articles, and this all leads to stress, anxiety and problems like, depression among them. As a result, this all creates a negative impact on their lives. Moreover, some people never do saving of funds for hard times. Like, if a person suffers from cancer, and he/she is not having enough money to get their required treatment, then it is really a malice problem. So, people must save a sufficient amount of their earnings for such issues. To conclude, everyone must spend their monthly wages really wisely, so that the ill-effects of over-buying things can be treated and people may not get into debt and sufferings which makes them physically and mentally unfit for life decisions. Therefore, sagacious approach is necessary for the holistic growth of the life.
In
The character between 'today' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "today’s" (curly apostrophe) or "today's" (straight apostrophe).
today`s
world, the standard of living of most of the individuals is rising day by day, due to urbanization. More
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people
are working nowadays, and they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a huge sum of money.
Moreover
, they
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use
their salaries to
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purchase
the materialistic things. I
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think
it has both
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positive
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as well as
detrimental effects on the public. Like, if someone is using their
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hard
-earned money on something that they
really
need, then it is a
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good
effort,
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but
if they are purchasing unnecessary things, then it is a major issue.

Undoubtedly
, everyone dreamt of buying the things they
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love
in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
However
,
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because
of lack of monies, they are unable to
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get
that thing.
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But
, when they
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start
earning, they
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utilise
their salaries on their dreamt items.
For instance
, a
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person
who was not able to
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buy
a car in his college days,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
his dream car, when he
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begins
his job. This all leads to sense of contentment and happiness among the
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persons
who fulfil their desired dreams.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
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utilise
their wages to raise their status in the society by spending them on luxury items, which they can be
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used
to mark their status and
thus
for the
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show
off purposes.
For example
,
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many
times,
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persons
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get
into debt, due to over-spending on the branded articles, and this all leads to
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stress
, anxiety and problems like, depression among them.
As a result
, this all creates a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on their
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lives
.

Moreover
,
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some
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people
never
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go saving".
do saving
of funds for
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hard
times. Like, if a
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person
suffers from cancer, and he/she is not having
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enough
money to
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get
their required treatment, then it is
really
a malice problem.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
save a sufficient amount of their earnings for such issues.

To conclude
, everyone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
spend their monthly wages
really
wisely
,
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so
that the ill-effects of over-buying things can
be treated
and
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people
may not
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get
into debt and sufferings which
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makes
them
physically
and mentally unfit for life decisions.
Therefore
, sagacious approach is necessary for the holistic growth of the life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Life of your generation is easier than that of your grandparents. Please include specific details and examples in your explanation. v. 296

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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