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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people know moreabout the modern world than their parents. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answe v.28

Young people know moreabout the modern world than their parents. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answe v. 28
In the contemporary era, many organizations consider distinct factors while recruiting someone. They not only evaluate the level of knowledge and experience, but also personality of a person always kept in mind by the recruiters. I am personally inclined to disagree with the statement that leadership is an inherited skill and this will elaborate others factors which are vital while hiring the people. To begin with, it is said that leadership skill is gained by the masses before birth, but it is not completely true because no one is born with any kind of skill and talent. Everything is based on the practice and struggle. Most of the people have become successful due to training which they gained from their lives and it helps them to learn that who to be a good leader. If a person starts to take initiatives and helping the group of people and become a good role model for them depends on the repetitive practice. For instance, from the autobiography of renowned person Mahatma Gandhi, people can see that after getting a lot of understanding from his own life they became a good leader in the life. Hence, leadership is indispensable skill which can be gained through experience and practice. Along with it, there are other some vital factors also there which are considered at the time of hiring new manager such as, good communication, good manners and sympathetic nature. Firstly, good communication is important because every manager need to talk with the customers and people of the group. In addition, if a manager has a sympathetic nature, then it is only possible with this skill that the customer can share feeling without hesitation with the manager. Every boss has to face tough conditions and they have to deal with the customers, so if there executive is calm and polite by nature, then he can solve any kind of problem with happiness. Ergo, other factors are also crucial while recruiting new supervisor. To recapitulate, leadership is not an inherited skill people can acquire it through life experience. Therefore, good communication and good manners are also important for hiring new managers.
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organizations consider distinct
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factors
while recruiting someone. They not
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only
evaluate the level of knowledge and experience,
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but
also
personality of a person always
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kept
in mind by the recruiters. I am
personally
inclined to disagree with the statement that
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leadership
is an inherited
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skill
and this will elaborate others
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factors
which are vital while hiring the
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people
.

To
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begin
with, it
is said
that
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leadership
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skill
is gained
by the masses
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before
birth,
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but
it is not completely true
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because
no one
is born
with any kind of
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skill
and talent. Everything
is based
on the practice and struggle. Most of the
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people
have become successful due to training which they gained from their
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lives
and it
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helps
them to learn that who to be a
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good
leader. If a person
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starts
to take initiatives and helping the group of
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people
and become a
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good
role model for them depends on the repetitive practice.
For instance
, from the autobiography of renowned person Mahatma Gandhi,
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people
can
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see
that after getting
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a lot of
understanding from his
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own
life they became a
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good
leader in the life.
Hence
,
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leadership
is indispensable
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skill
which can
be gained
through experience and practice.

Along with it, there are other
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vital
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also
there which
are considered
at the time of hiring new
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manager
such as,
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good
communication,
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good
manners and sympathetic nature.
Firstly
,
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good
communication is
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important
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because
every
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manager
need to talk with the customers and
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people
of the group.
In addition
, if a
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manager
has a sympathetic nature, then it is
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only
possible with this
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skill
that the customer can share feeling without hesitation with the
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manager
. Every boss
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has to
face tough
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conditions and
they
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have to
deal with the customers,
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so
if
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there executive
is calm and polite by nature, then he can solve any kind of problem with happiness. Ergo, other
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factors
are
also
crucial while recruiting new supervisor.

To recapitulate,
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leadership
is not an inherited
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skill
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people
can acquire it through life experience.
Therefore
,
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good
communication and
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good
manners are
also
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important
for hiring new
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managers
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Young people know moreabout the modern world than their parents. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answe v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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